|Reviews for To Die For|
| The Weatherwitch chapter 3 . 5/26/2010
this is great!
please update soon?
| Zelda chapter 1 . 1/14/2010
Sorry, but I think that someone called Elaine Swanne is basically trying to steal your story.
Unless you KNOW that they have the same title, description and the main character is called Eaving. I dunno, I could be wrong as I haven't actually read the thing yet.
Um. Okay, well, I hope I'm mistaken. Thanks. x
| ichigolynn chapter 3 . 3/1/2009
Lol, I liked this story, kinda relates to our normal antics nowadays right? Hahaa update soon woman!
| ichigolynn chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
| Miss Mysteries chapter 3 . 10/31/2008
| The Revolution's Child chapter 3 . 9/11/2008
Okay, for pointers...
-"There has been" should be "There have been"
-"several things black" could be "several black things"
-"little Blonde hobbit" ...the 'b' doesn't need to be capitalized
-"on their ass?" you should probably use 'his', because you've already established that the young master is a boy
-“that’s the only thing ugly could be "that's the only ugly thing"
-"Then, she turned to Lucas"... this phrase is kind of weird, because Eaving has already stated that she can't remember his name, and so we generally know him as The Dell
So, mostly, just watch for punctuation, capitalization, and word order. Other than that, it's very enjoyable! Please keep writing!
| Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 3 . 9/9/2008
i fucking love the story!
cant wait for more!
hope you update soon!
| say.the.word chapter 3 . 9/9/2008
Nice story. Even though you've only posted three chapters, i love Eaving. She's so spunky, feisty, and such a strong character.
I can't wait to read more!
| wabam chapter 3 . 9/9/2008
I like the 'corpse city'thing. It just made thei ntro a little more interesting.
Nice job. I'm looking forward to more.
| pandacutie1313 chapter 2 . 9/4/2008
love it love it love it i hope the other chapter will be up soon
| The Revolution's Child chapter 2 . 9/4/2008
| Jai Yukimura chapter 1 . 8/28/2008
| sunsetting chapter 1 . 8/28/2008
the "aiiya" EPIC WIN.
oh and the whole cultural background, too. ex: the bargaining in sf parents being proud of that HA. so true. uh anyways, it looks like it's off to a good start, so just keep it up for now. can't wait to see more. (:
| Samm.xXx chapter 1 . 8/28/2008
I like it ... its different but its cool. Keep writing.
| The Revolution's Child chapter 1 . 8/28/2008
Hhm. Interesting. :)