|Reviews for Everything Almost Happens|
| Isca chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
"It leaves black ribbon wakes in my hopelessness." A very vivid, beautiful line :)
I love your use of descriptive wording throughout, it really enhances the imagery!
'Burning Body' and 'Arctic Figure' are a good match/pair.
"As rain berates my window panes." Incredible imagery here!
The sentence "But I have this funny feeling that will never happen" should be revised. Maybe it should be "But I have this funny feeling that that will never happen"? Just my thoughts.
Also, there's a "can't" somewhere near the end with an extra apostrophe.
I liked it. It was very honest and open; very emotionally complicated.
Keep up the good work! :D