Reviews for Slap in the Face
May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 9/4/2008
Hm...Me thinks the moral is "Listen to other's advice because it might be better than your own."

A nice and modern allegory. So...Is this a story written after your own experience? lol

One suggestion- perhaps a bit more description on the characters, the scenery, and the horse himself. It will help bring your story more to life.
Awesome Albino chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
Good moral! My only criticism would be that it was a bit predictable! But it ended the way you wanted it to to get your point across! Nice job!
Savella chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
Ugh. I know what that's like.

Good story, by the way. This is based off of personal stuff, isn't it? Is Buddy Gabriel or Lenny (that's what his name was, right...?) Anyhoo, I liked it a lot! There were a few pieces here and there where it was hard to follow, but that might just be me and my lack of rodeo skills. Barrel racing. Whatever! Nothing really specific, but I'd just read through it and see if you can improve anywhere. Not my say, but I'm just suggesting. Hope you know that I love it, either way!