|Reviews for On the way|
| May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 10/7/2008
This is powerful. Very different from the others, but in a good way. Peace.
| Isca chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
I liked the first line, it was a great way to start off the poem. In the second stanza, the second line feels a bit awkward. Maybe it would be better if it said "I didn't think there was an end." Just my thoughts though.
"To grow, means to lose something and change." Very wise words, my friend!
WOW! You stepped on all the daisies...that part was incredible!
"And I carry on waiting." That line is so beautiful! :)
| Lostwind chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
The last lines of the piece were the real clincher here, they had a lot of packed power waiting to be unleashed to me. I think i understand a message that everyone needs to walk their own path, but that doesn't mean others can't help them along the way. In this case, it sounds like the narrator is dependent upon it, which worked nicely at the end. Very well written. Good job.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
Decided to stick with realize? lol
I do like the piece, the whole metaphor of ways is really great and you definitely get a feel for the narrators emotions. I also love the daisy thing, its great.