Oh, I'm anxious to read more. The use of fact is a smart way to go. It gives the story a more unique and realistic sense.

Cheating a bit, but I got carried away with the last two chapters and didn’t want to top. I really enjoyed this. I loved the balance between the past and the present and the way you move between them. Becca’s emotions when she was caught in the store were really well captured. It was that casual racism that’s so inbreed it’s like hitting your head on a rock.

Loved the ending too, you nearly made me cry. I liked the way that Charlie was almost like her hero and Becca’s gradual realisation that he was leaving because he couldn’t stay which made her decide to do something herself.

I’m really enjoying this. I love the balance between the past and the present and the way you move between them. I’m looking forward to seeing how this is going to be resolved.

I love the way you describe things in this chapter. Becca’s feelings about chasing the hare and the image of Charlie in the pick up with his hand out of the window. You capture the moment perfectly. You called the ‘hare’ ‘hard’ once but I didn’t pick up on anything else.

Enjoyable chapter and I’m looking forward to meeting Charlie.

I enjoyed the mythology that was woven in with this. And referring to the transformation as ‘changement’ made it seem more unreal.

The physical description of the transformation was well done, especially being bulled tight like the draw string on a bag, but Becca’s emotional response to it seemed a bit bland. Although if she has been doing it for a while she may be used to it.

The way it ties in with her period, and asking a boy how it works for them made me smile.

The way you described Charlie was well done as well, even though he wasn’t there I got a real sense of his personality.

I think you did a very good job with this story! It was very well written, and the plot was very well thought out. You are an amazing writer; keep it up.

Beautiful story. I loved it.

Oh, so this was like historical fiction? You don't know how much I love historical fiction! This was an awesome story, and I think I understand that whole guy in the convertible thing now.

Wow, this was a fantastic story. I loved every chapter of it. You did a good job and I applaud you. Be strong in whatever you plan to do for the future.

Velvet.

That was terribly wrong! The whole racial thing, I mean. And Becca's not even Mexican! She's Native American, right? Now I want to go punch someone. ):

Anyway, what's with the person and the gun? He's not going to kill her, is he? That would be a terrible end! I'm not so sure if I want to read the last chapter, but I'll do it anyway.

This has been a great read. You do well with it.

Velvety.

That was terrible, for that to happen to Deanna. Yeah, I don't know what's going on with people today, but that was a scene a lot of people can relate to.

I think that's the charm to this story. It's not just what has happened, but what is happening. You do a good job getting that down. :)

VelvetyCheerio.

Well, hello there. I should probably go back and review the first chapter, but I want to keep going forward. This story is interesting. The 'becoming' was strange reading, but somehow, because you didn't add so much shocking detail to it, it was harder to let the story go.

I didn't understand something in this chapter though. Who was the guy in the convertible? And what was with the joke? I didn't get it.

Well, I like how the chapters are short and all. It makes it an easy and fun read, not to mention compelling.

VelvetyCheerio.

I really liked this; I think it-the ending, especially-might've been a little rushed, though.

Aw, that was sad.

And finally, some action! Too bad there's only one chapter left.

"She writher as her thick fur pulled into her skin and her nails contracted into fingertips."

That should be "writhed", I think.

Oh, I thought that the thing in the car was happening at the time that the rest of the chapter was.

"The hard shrieked once, just briefly, and fell silent."

That was the only mistake I caught.("Hard" instead of "hare".)

I wonder who the blond guy is. Is he a werewolf hunter?