Reviews for then believe that we have lost our eyes
TheWitch'sLover chapter 1 . 5/30/2013
This is really amazing. Almost had tears in my eyes at the end. You capture the scene and atmosphere of this moment beautifully and I can feel the tenderness and love between these two guys. Defintely loved, can't believe you only have fourteen reviews: this is going on my favourites x
GrangerDanger333 chapter 1 . 2/10/2013
This is brilliant. Really love all the 'It thunders.' bits -really builds up the sense of waiting which is probably what you intended. So yeah, structure was good, characters weren't developed loads cos it was short but I understood them enough to enjoy them. And I just love the general story idea. Even though it wasn't explained loads what was happening, I didn't feel dissatisfied with it or anything. Beauuutiful :)
theangrypotato chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
I like the characters' personalities
This is so sweet and sad and.

Lovely :)
Jill Montino chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
My stomach hurts. This piece- no work of art is so utterly beautiful my insides are twitching. I feel it in my fingertips and in my toes; it's this dreadful feeling that brings you to tears. The short paragraphs does it for me, and I can actually see how pieces of newspapers are blowing by in the abandoned city and how the boys walk there, leaning against eachother; and how the sky darkens and the light show begins. And how they hold onto to eachother until the last minute... Kudos to you, my dear.

- Jill Montino.
Jace Wayland chapter 1 . 1/16/2011
I loved it so much, thank you for writing it!
K chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
Beautiful story. Absolutely perfect.
Uncle Rupert chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
Thats was beautiful and sad all at the same time. loved it :)
I licka da penis chapter 1 . 6/4/2010
That story was truly, a work of art. I loved how the two of them stayed even though they could try to escape, that they stayed with eachother and stayed wth eachother the whole time.

I enjpyed every part of it and I now have to find more of your work and read it.


Xx Dead Soul xX
Mauvelous Green Rainbows chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
oh sweetness, this was soo sad and amazing and sweet and made me cry at the end. it was perfect, i love how it always started with "It thunders." at the beginning of each break, except for the end, which was perfect! god, i feel for those two, and im so glad they got to spend their last moments with each other, always alwaya always~!
Le Cosmonaute chapter 1 . 8/22/2009
Wow, that was superb. I have been left breathless by the whole thing: the tone, the repetition of "It thunders", and especially the ending. And even though it's one chapter, I got such a great feel for the characters and watched them change and just... I loved it.
frogs of war chapter 1 . 6/18/2009
Wow. I like it a lot.

The love scene was beautiful with the POV of the one seeing/hearing/doing, rather than the one feeling.
The-Camster chapter 1 . 2/25/2009
Wow, that was really good! The way you said it just came to you sounds like how my rambles come to me: Randomly. That really is a good short-story. It is also an interesting idea. The thought that when the world is supposed to end, there probably will be people that stay behind and enjoy the storm.

Keep On Writing!


P.S.- The way you always started a new scene with 'It thunders.' was a neat touch; it added an almost poetic flow to the story.
Penemuel chapter 1 . 11/20/2008
This was a great story and I really enjoyed reading it. I look forward to your future works. Great job!
Off the grid chapter 1 . 9/13/2008
The repetitive use of It Thunders was brilliantly ominous. I love the sort of youthful maturity in the shortness of the dialogue. I love the kind of standing-on-the-brink feel of the whole piece that you somehow managed to play out over the whole thing without it going stale. I especially love the ending.
romance at short notice chapter 1 . 9/7/2008
God, I loved this.

There's really no other way to say it. You captured the desperation so perfectly in those last few sections that I nearly cried; Zach and Julian's conviction to stay in the one place that wasn't safe hooked me from the start.

It was fantastic, and I can't wait to click back to your profile and find more wonderful pieces.