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![]() ![]() ![]() This is really amazing. Almost had tears in my eyes at the end. You capture the scene and atmosphere of this moment beautifully and I can feel the tenderness and love between these two guys. Defintely loved, can't believe you only have fourteen reviews: this is going on my favourites x |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is brilliant. Really love all the 'It thunders.' bits -really builds up the sense of waiting which is probably what you intended. So yeah, structure was good, characters weren't developed loads cos it was short but I understood them enough to enjoy them. And I just love the general story idea. Even though it wasn't explained loads what was happening, I didn't feel dissatisfied with it or anything. Beauuutiful :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() D: I like the characters' personalities This is so sweet and sad and. Lovely :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() My stomach hurts. This piece- no work of art is so utterly beautiful my insides are twitching. I feel it in my fingertips and in my toes; it's this dreadful feeling that brings you to tears. The short paragraphs does it for me, and I can actually see how pieces of newspapers are blowing by in the abandoned city and how the boys walk there, leaning against eachother; and how the sky darkens and the light show begins. And how they hold onto to eachother until the last minute... Kudos to you, my dear. - Jill Montino. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it so much, thank you for writing it! |
![]() ![]() Beautiful story. Absolutely perfect. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thats was beautiful and sad all at the same time. loved it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() That story was truly, a work of art. I loved how the two of them stayed even though they could try to escape, that they stayed with eachother and stayed wth eachother the whole time. I enjpyed every part of it and I now have to find more of your work and read it. Signed Xx Dead Soul xX |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh sweetness, this was soo sad and amazing and sweet and made me cry at the end. it was perfect, i love how it always started with "It thunders." at the beginning of each break, except for the end, which was perfect! god, i feel for those two, and im so glad they got to spend their last moments with each other, always alwaya always~! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, that was superb. I have been left breathless by the whole thing: the tone, the repetition of "It thunders", and especially the ending. And even though it's one chapter, I got such a great feel for the characters and watched them change and just... I loved it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. I like it a lot. The love scene was beautiful with the POV of the one seeing/hearing/doing, rather than the one feeling. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, that was really good! The way you said it just came to you sounds like how my rambles come to me: Randomly. That really is a good short-story. It is also an interesting idea. The thought that when the world is supposed to end, there probably will be people that stay behind and enjoy the storm. Keep On Writing! ~The-Camster P.S.- The way you always started a new scene with 'It thunders.' was a neat touch; it added an almost poetic flow to the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a great story and I really enjoyed reading it. I look forward to your future works. Great job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The repetitive use of It Thunders was brilliantly ominous. I love the sort of youthful maturity in the shortness of the dialogue. I love the kind of standing-on-the-brink feel of the whole piece that you somehow managed to play out over the whole thing without it going stale. I especially love the ending. |
![]() ![]() ![]() God, I loved this. There's really no other way to say it. You captured the desperation so perfectly in those last few sections that I nearly cried; Zach and Julian's conviction to stay in the one place that wasn't safe hooked me from the start. It was fantastic, and I can't wait to click back to your profile and find more wonderful pieces. |