Reviews for the art of drowning
cassi crysta chapter 1 . 11/15/2014
dude. so describes my just ended relationship. whoa. so I like that you used 'Virginia" and "river"...intentional, no? Virginia...vagina...river as a phallic symbol. ha. I like it.
whisper queen chapter 1 . 3/27/2013
lovely poem
did you steal my poetry chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
"she said: I am a story,

I am truth beyond the moon,

and she crept over the stars,

their tails flailing after her silky white hair.

they say she uttered not a sound

the night the tides engulfed her whole;

her wilted body-

dying like dried up thyme leaves

spewed across riotous waves-


like red roses across forgotten graves

of a time when we were all still young.

somewhere in the fence of her smile

lay a broken track. a break in a chain

that allowed water through,

like a heavy raining torrent

that enabled her to be flooded.

i found her face down that early morn',

with lips forget-me-not blue—

her last wish,

i would so believe.

i recall that blue, the color of that las before she reached nirvana.

and i say

if she is virginia.

then you are the river,

the mouth that swallowed her whole. "

viennacantabile chapter 1 . 1/1/2009
ohmygod I love this. Especially how you get to the end and realize what it's about. Lovely and heartbreaking.
AndIfYouCant chapter 1 . 10/27/2008

First taste of sugar && caffeine - they know,

it only happens once

No secret places?

girly girlie secrets abound,

love too but its not the same

never the same

cats & frogs.

stories & passtimes

Youre superior in this than me.

No doubt no doubt Im torn.

Put your feather to that ink and...



let it spill
Alicia Marianne chapter 1 . 9/26/2008
loved the last sentence. its good to see yu are back and i hope you update soon!
sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 9/16/2008
your words always ache.

this is different from your usual, somehow. i wouldn't call it worse or better- it's something else. i like it just as much but it moves me in a different way.
Edgar Wellington chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
hm...I do like this poem, but...well...clearly this is about Virginia Woolf's suicide (I hope I don't spoil this for anyone). I guess I like this poem because it feels like an opening to more grand ideas. the end I find it a sad (and effective) feminist piece.
she smolders chapter 1 . 9/8/2008
The way this ends is so simple yet poignant. I really like how the imagery and literary devices you use are so subtle and can still leave me speechless. Take care.
Murder245 chapter 1 . 9/8/2008
I am amazed.