Going as I read; Chapter One,

A four year old is reading Calc? Interesting, but I don't know how I feel about how realistic it is.

"Infinity, a word that sounded like a drummer’s flourish, was without limits. It didn’t begin, it didn’t end, it just was." Very, very, very well written line. I love it. D [Maybe that's just the drummer in me though.]

If this baby demanded the sacrifice of his parents’ lives, he was welcome to it, as long as he didn’t think to hinder Infinity’s in any way. - Made me think of Bradbury's The Tiny Assassin. Maybe this could be worded a little more clearly, instead of lives make the word time?

"The houses in her development were empty most of the day, homes to commuting divorcees." Shouldn't this be; "The houses in her development were empty most of the day; homes to commuting divorcees."

I'll give this another read today and see if I catch anything else.

She's already 14?

Ah. I don't remember very well how old she was before... .

I can see why Leesville would come down on her like that, but I'd probably like it. I'm boring like that. D:

Mm, something tells me her life's only gonna get worse.

:(

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~cGs

I really like this story.

Through my eyes, it's very dark and has deep meaning.

For some people I realize, it may even be hard to follow.

I'm enjoying it, and am expecting more. :D

~cGs

Very good! Both well written and cynically humorous, you build a good base for a good story to form! The characters are very real and fit together like puzzle pieces. Your metaphors are great too! XP