Reviews for Pretending to Breathe |
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XxXMusicSavesMySoulXxX chapter 3 . 5/16/2010 Oh god, that's so sad! About her boyfriend and all. At first, when she picked up his trash, I honestly thought she was going to dump it all over him, but I like how you made her dump it on his car. That part was epic. xD I can't wait to see his reaction to it. I wonder whats going to happen next :P |
bearface chapter 3 . 10/12/2008 "Dayumn, you go girl!" The trash and car scene was classic. I want to read more about Jeff. I love the way you sort of draw out the mystery of him. I can't wait to see how you draw out the rest of your story. Awesome job chicka! |
KatieTheWriter chapter 3 . 9/29/2008 OMG that was amazing! I am in awe of your serious writing skills. So beautiful. And I loved the ending, where Lily threw the trash at Lucas' car! I would do that too, the nerve he had telling her to pick up his trash! What a creep! Aw, the bottom made me sad. Who is Jeff Barnhart? I'm going to check out the character photos now. Good job! I can't wait to read more of this! -Hugs- Katie |
KatieTheWriter chapter 2 . 9/29/2008 Wow, you know how to hook a reader Elle! Great job, I'm going to read the first chapter! |
Lonely Kerl chapter 3 . 9/28/2008 this is really good. I can't wait til you put more up! |
only pretending chapter 2 . 9/27/2008 You've shown a lot of emotion with just a few words. I love it already. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good work. |
Written chapter 3 . 9/26/2008 wow, this is really good so far! i don't like the main guy at all so far, but maybe thats the point :) hope you update soon. |
Haley Jean chapter 3 . 9/17/2008 YAY! Such a quick update & you definitely didn't fail to deliver!( But what really surprised me is that you responded! xD I totally love your writing style & the flow of everything. Some parts were a little choppy but everything became clear at the end. I totally didn't know she was a new kid, so yeahh. I was like, "What?" for about a minute. :P Oh, I don't mean to be a total grammar nerd, but [i think] it should be... "Perfect; life would certainly never be that way again." Perfect. Life would certainly never be that way again. & Can't for another update. OMG, I'm greedy. Bahahahahah. |
Booklover91 chapter 3 . 9/17/2008 este story sounds muy interesando ] |
KatieTheWriter chapter 1 . 9/14/2008 I'm looking forward to the first chapter and reading this story. The poem was beautiful! Honestly beautiful. Good job~ KatieTheWriter :) |
Katie Saychiadu chapter 2 . 9/13/2008 This is freaking fabulous. I swear, I can't wait to see what the heck that meant. I have some ideas of what might be going on, but I'm usually wrong, so I'll keep them to myself. Anyway, can't wait to read more! |
Haley Jean chapter 2 . 9/13/2008 I think i'm gonna love this story. The prologue sort of confused me. I mean, was her speech really that short? Hahaha, hopefully you update soon! Can't wait to see what happens(; |
il capitano chapter 2 . 9/13/2008 A really good beginning Hope the next chapters are longer and more detailed about the upcoming story Overall really gud story so far totally kool update as soon as possible please thx |