Reviews for Pretending to Breathe
XxXMusicSavesMySoulXxX chapter 3 . 5/16/2010
Oh god, that's so sad! About her boyfriend and all. At first, when she picked up his trash, I honestly thought she was going to dump it all over him, but I like how you made her dump it on his car. That part was epic. xD I can't wait to see his reaction to it. I wonder whats going to happen next :P
bearface chapter 3 . 10/12/2008
"Dayumn, you go girl!"

The trash and car scene was classic. I want to read more about Jeff. I love the way you sort of draw out the mystery of him. I can't wait to see how you draw out the rest of your story. Awesome job chicka!
KatieTheWriter chapter 3 . 9/29/2008
OMG that was amazing! I am in awe of your serious writing skills. So beautiful. And I loved the ending, where Lily threw the trash at Lucas' car! I would do that too, the nerve he had telling her to pick up his trash! What a creep!

Aw, the bottom made me sad. Who is Jeff Barnhart?

I'm going to check out the character photos now. Good job! I can't wait to read more of this!


KatieTheWriter chapter 2 . 9/29/2008
Wow, you know how to hook a reader Elle! Great job, I'm going to read the first chapter!
Lonely Kerl chapter 3 . 9/28/2008
this is really good. I can't wait til you put more up!
only pretending chapter 2 . 9/27/2008
You've shown a lot of emotion with just a few words. I love it already. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good work.
Written chapter 3 . 9/26/2008
wow, this is really good so far! i don't like the main guy at all so far, but maybe thats the point :) hope you update soon.
Haley Jean chapter 3 . 9/17/2008
YAY! Such a quick update & you definitely didn't fail to deliver!( But what really surprised me is that you responded! xD I totally love your writing style & the flow of everything. Some parts were a little choppy but everything became clear at the end. I totally didn't know she was a new kid, so yeahh. I was like, "What?" for about a minute. :P

Oh, I don't mean to be a total grammar nerd, but [i think] it should be...

"Perfect; life would certainly never be that way again."

Perfect. Life would certainly never be that way again.

& Can't for another update. OMG, I'm greedy. Bahahahahah.
Booklover91 chapter 3 . 9/17/2008
este story sounds muy interesando ]
KatieTheWriter chapter 1 . 9/14/2008
I'm looking forward to the first chapter and reading this story. The poem was beautiful! Honestly beautiful.

Good job~

KatieTheWriter :)
Katie Saychiadu chapter 2 . 9/13/2008
This is freaking fabulous. I swear, I can't wait to see what the heck that meant. I have some ideas of what might be going on, but I'm usually wrong, so I'll keep them to myself. Anyway, can't wait to read more!
Haley Jean chapter 2 . 9/13/2008
I think i'm gonna love this story. The prologue sort of confused me. I mean, was her speech really that short? Hahaha, hopefully you update soon! Can't wait to see what happens(;
il capitano chapter 2 . 9/13/2008
A really good beginning

Hope the next chapters are longer and more detailed about the upcoming story

Overall really gud story so far

totally kool

update as soon as possible please