Reviews for bonfire
Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 9/29/2008
Your descriptions here are amazing.

'bonfire ready

Flames like acrobats that flip and tease and twist.'

I love that image. Wonderfully written.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/14/2008
"Inside his eyes, tiny spools wound"... it seemed weird that this was in past tense since the rest is in present.

Your punctuation is pretty much perfect (though I think between the second and third line you need something and I think there should be a comma between the book and snake thing), which is great. I also really love your descriptions (as always; they are absolutely beautiful and so unique. I also like the balance between similes and just descriptions. Really great piece.

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