Its weird cause I feel like there is some type control thing going on in their relationship. I don't really know who Melissa is cause she keeps switching up her act, and I can't tell if Seth is "changing" her or not cause I'm not positive about her personality. It definitely feels like Seth is pulling the strings though; the girl is walking on eggshells not to upset him and when he called her a Christine, it plays in his favor as if he knew that she would do everything to prove him wrong like he's taking advantage of her innocence. I know h had a rough life which would explain a lot of his aloofness, but he also seems very unattatched to Melissa while she seems to put so much stock in their relationship. I'm nervous that there is some underlying trouble in paradise. Yet, there is also a pretty ginormous chance that I'm over thinking all of it. We will just see I guess.

I love it!

great chapter! It's interesting to see Brian's character develop.

This is definitely my favourite out of all your stories. I really, really like the characters. I actually have completely warmed up to Brian and think he's great. I'd love to hear more about him... maybe in a sequel? *hinthint* lol nah, I know a lot of authors hate writing sequels :P

The picnic scene was so cute, especially the 'are you cold?' bit. haha. The next chapter sounds interesting ;)

Can't wait for the next update!

hahaa. oh~ loved it! thanks for the chapter! :D :D :D

Seth is sucha bad boy! XD

question! Is Melissa still a virgin?

This story is amazing. I love Seth and Melissa together. I think Seth is my favorite character. I can't wait to read more. It's so exciting. Update soon. :)

Jamii

I LOVE THIS STORY...i know it's like the classic good girl-meets-bad-boy kind of storyline, but the dialogue isn't too contrived/cheesy and i love all the literary references you make. Anyway, please update soon b/c this story is so addicting. Thanks!

I should have mentioned this earlier, but 'The Phantom of the Opera' is one of my favorite books. I really like the Erik/Christine/Raoul Seth/Melissa/Brian thing you have going on. It's quite clever, and the fact that you directly said it *facepalms* makes it more interesting, because it's one of those things a reader can overlook since it's staring her in the face! LOL

I like this chapter, it's nice to see her father's hypocrisy. A guy friend once told me that dads are overprotective of their daughters because they were young once and know all the naughty thoughts floating around in other guys' heads.

You listed 'Grease' as Brian's favorite movie. I'm not trying to stereotype guys - I've got tons of both straight and gay friends I'm tight with, and straight guys usually say 'Gone in 60 Seconds' or 'The Godfather' or 'Scarface' as their favorite movie. They probably like 'Grease' but odds of them saying it's a favorite are slim because it's considered a girl movie.

Okay, the one criticism I have to say now that I've gotten this far is that in the initial chapters, I thought Brian was gay. You should revise some of the things he says in the early chapters, because no straight guy talks like:

"Probably not. In order to be as confident as he is the guy has to know what he's got to offer. He probably is pretty good in bed." (Chapter 2) - It sounds the way a girl would say it, guys don't talk about each other's sexual prowess like that.

Just rethink how Brian gets presented if he actually is straight, because honestly he comes off as bisexual based on the things he's saying. Don't worry, Seth is working well.

I like that your characters have different layers to them.

I'm surprised this story isn't as popular as your other stories. I think it's pretty good and has a very good flow. The story is fresh, and the characters work well.

I definitely know what you mean by updating stories based on popularity. I do the same thing with stories I write. Sure, I'll finish it for myself, but editing it and posting take time.

I actually like this better than 'Brothers and Best Friends' so you can add me as a reader waiting for updates.

A few things came to mind as I read this:

1) JD Salinger passed away last week, so this is odd timing.

2) For some reason, I keep thinking Seth is Jess from Gilmore Girls.

thanks so much for the chapter! Seth's a cutie and what he and Melissa is pretty hott. XD

but i still love what Jenna and Wesley have even more!

XD i'm currently re-reading The Promotion actually ;P

is the Salinger youre tlking about J.D. Salinger?

cuz if it is, then I read Catcher in th Rye in school this year.

It was good, and J.D. Salinger died last wednesday. :(

he was a weird, but great author... :] May he RestInPeace.

Hmm, this seems like a good story, but i'm a bit strapped for time at the moment with school and everything. Though it sounds like a good story, i'm not sure i am very fond of the video rambling in this chapter. does it have any relevance to the story or is it just a little conversation you decided to add to the chapter. And as for the characters, i see melissa to be too innocent and sheltered and somewhat protected. it's almost as if she doesn't want to be materialistic like her parents are. i mean sure not all teens/children etc are like that, but i just think that her personality doesn't quite suit the kind of mood you've portrayed in the summary, or in the story for that matter. you say that she is rich, goes to a wealthy school, yet you contradict that by saying that she's airheaded. and i assume that her mother takes that she is dumb. is she not?

however, this story may salvage some remaining potential and i will continue to read it at a later date. other than a few hazy details it's good.

VKEE/,

I love this story. It's not a plot I've seen often (I read a lot - don't be offended that I didn't say it was completely original, please! ) and you are doing an awesome job. I love Seth, but I actually kind of like Brian as well. I feel sorry for him even more than Seth, probably because Seth at least knows what he wants and how to get it, and in my experience that makes you a lot happier than money.

I know this part is kind of a while ago, but I just want to say... Take it from someone who knows, you captured the feeling of friends with benefits perfectly. )

I LOVE the fact that your characters have personalities. Stereotypical characters are one of my pet peeves in stories! And I love how you are developing so many of them instead of just Melissa and Seth. You have me curious to know how her parents will react when they find out about their relationship, I want to know when Brian is going to confess that he has the hots for Melissa (because clearly he does, even if he doesn't know it yet!), and I have the feeling that there is more to be learned about Seth. Bring it on!

Also, I appreciate the fact that you are updating even though you are insanely busy. One of the marks of a good author is respect and appreciation for their readers.

Pretty much, to sum this all up, you are awesome, Unwanted is awesome, and I will be right there reviewing as soon as you update.

Sending you all the power of the muses,

Happyflavored