Reviews for Sophomore Year |
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Monkeydoisn't logged in chapter 19 . 12/24/2008 Is the title to this one supposed to be "You Could Have Humored Me"? Because if so... you've misspelled it. It's still a good poem though. Keep it Up, Ella |
ThisThingCalledLife chapter 18 . 12/7/2008 I think you've put this one just about perfectly. This happened to me and one of my best friends when we went to college. Maybe if he read the poem he would understand why I don't bother to call him anymore. Once again, CC, I will tell you that you are brillant. DFTBA, Ella |
Dot Cubed chapter 18 . 12/7/2008 Oh my God, this one feels like my entire life. Or-not my entire life, just the progress of my relationship with one person. We were so close at the beginning of last year and now we barely talk anymore. I love this, basically, because it hurts so much. I love ALL of these, actually. I haven't been reviewing them, but I've been reading them, and honestly, you write such amazing poetry it's kind of ridiculous. I'm in awe. |
its.Nothing.Special chapter 17 . 11/19/2008 Oh, my goodness. This was fantastic. My favorite so far, I think. We have discussions every day in English. This pretty much sums it up. You're brilliant for being able to pen this without getting the atmosphere/thoughts all blurry/diluted; they were instead very striking, and so very true. [Where are your works cited if not sitting just/across the room?] Oh, that was great. You should've HEARD the parrots in my class today ("well, basically what she said . . . [and why do they go on to SAY what "she said?" i don't know, but i'm pretty sure we just heard it]). It's frustrating. And it's so sad. Like, there are so many places you can go with just one question, but one hand goes up -all the hands go up- and they all have the same answer. And you just think, how is that? Why is that? Can't we get away from that? I just seriously loved this. Seriously. Ineffably. Those rhetorical questions - amazing. Like, the body's reaction to a student too lazy/afraid to think - it really should hurt that much. Last line really drove it home. The parentheses really worked. [(And doesn't that just sting your cheeks?)] I really WISHED people were that embarrassed to spit out the words uttered just two seconds ago by the girl sitting two seats away from them, but - yeah. Doesn't really work that way. Anything for the participation points, right? Fantastic work, as per usual. (This poem makes me glad because I know that you won't ever stop thinking even if sometimes you might think those people around you are.) ;)becky |
Ernest Bloom chapter 17 . 11/18/2008 wow, this one ("A Discussion Gone Incredibly WRONG") is incredibly RIGHT: you capture fantastically how I felt for years and years, surrounded by swarms of intelligent parrots just a tiny bit of effort away from emitting actual original thoughts...and the way you tell it is terrific. keep up the great work. |
aslanslamb chapter 9 . 11/18/2008 "...because they don't know my name and they already don't like me." Love that line. How is it that practically everybody can relate to this poem and yet it's about feeling lonely? I guess we're all lonely and we're all scared to tell. I like your writing. It's simple but not simplistic. |
The Second Limb Near The Nose chapter 9 . 11/9/2008 I found a bus that could get you to Norway, Land of Vikings! You'd have to be at the bustop near your house at 6:10, which is way freaking early, but still...Yet, I guess that's not really the problem, is it? It's doubtful your parents would even let you go. And there's that fourth limb-who would totally switch if you did. Urgh, it's a mess. I wish I was with you still. Norway's no fun without my toga budies-I just wish you could come, cause I know you'd have friends and everythign (the polar bears here are really nice) This sucks. I'm not even kidding, it really, truly does. |
Cicero Williams chapter 4 . 11/3/2008 Your work suggests an anti-establishment feel. And yet, there is much truth behind your words. To our teachers, we are just faces at first, perhaps even less. We are just responses to the roll call, placeholders in the seats. However, I must respectfully disagree. It may not seem like it at first, but if you take the time to get to know your teachers and get them to know you, your school experience will be so much better. Take it from me, one who has finished high school: sometimes the teachers that intimidate you the most will end up being the teachers that you like the best. A teacher whom I met in my sophomore year freaked me out. When I found out, my senior year, that I would have him as a teacher for my 20th Century Literature class, I was very apprehensive. However, we got to know each other, and a mutual understanding, and yes, even a friendship, was formed between us. I'm not saying this is true for all teachers. Some teachers don't care three cucumbers about who you are or where you come from or what you can do. Some teachers have become embittered to the process and are no longer fit to teach, in my mind. This may be the case with this particular teacher about whom you write. I cannot say. However, I do hope you will forgive me for writing such a long review and maybe, just maybe, take my advice into consideration. |
Ernest Bloom chapter 15 . 10/21/2008 another super one. |
Ernest Bloom chapter 14 . 10/21/2008 this one is really fantastic. what's wrong with the greek mythology references? keep it up, kiddo! |
Ernest Bloom chapter 3 . 10/21/2008 see...you get what's _worth_ writing about. fantastic. you don't waste your readers' time. fin - fun |
Ernest Bloom chapter 1 . 10/21/2008 you have a real talent for nailing these nuanced details that put all the life in the scene that practially everyone else overlooks. bravo. |
False Masquerade chapter 1 . 10/17/2008 this is awesome, it is exactly how i felt when i started high school. Where no one from my juniors was there. it can be pretty hard to start off but then things work out eventually and you meet lots of amazing new people and make awesome new friends. Am now in my last year of high school and i had always thought that i would never be able to make any friends but i was wrong thank God. By the way whats a Sophomore? sorry I dont know because I live in England and it is a different system Keep up the good work Soffy~ |
Dot Cubed chapter 15 . 10/16/2008 I love the imagery in this SO MUCH. Like, the New England fall canvas part just makes me kind of happy, because I love looking out the window and being able to see that. And the last lines just gut me. But in a good way. :) |
ThisThingCalledLife chapter 14 . 10/4/2008 But I like when it relates to made-up stuff in Greek plays... (oh and I haven't picked a poem yet.. mostly because I haven't been at my computer in a while) Anyway, keep writing this anthology (if you want to call it that), because I for one love it. |