|Reviews for Desire|
| TinyMusicalShore chapter 1 . 11/8/2008
Oh. That was awesome.
| deefective chapter 1 . 10/18/2008
Oh wow. This whole entire piece just FLOWS so well. I read it out loud and not once did I trip over a word. Nicely arranged, indeed.
"Feast of flesh. I want. I want."
That line right there takes the cake. Not only does it create amazing imagery and atmosphere to the whole piece but the fact that the second "I want" is in italics emphasizes the whole feel of the narrator. You can tell that this person really has a desire.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
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| Jubbles Bubbles chapter 1 . 10/15/2008
Good emphasis in the right words. 'Flattered' was great.
| aprettywar chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
this is fantastic. you've conveyed very strong and passionate imagery, and i think it works quite well. keep up the good work!
| Narq chapter 1 . 9/17/2008
hey, this is Narq from Akano-Narq. it should be a semi-colon after the groping hands.
oh, I like this very much
| Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 9/17/2008
very, very good piece. I loved it.
| a certain slant of light chapter 1 . 9/17/2008
Love the two last lines of the first stanza, and the two last lines of the third stanza xD I really like this one. Very much so. )