Reviews for jack in the box
shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 10/11/2008
loved it, so much imagery i think that this piece would make our eglish teacher proud *haha vocab sentences*
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/6/2008
I like the way the story flows, but still each stanza is really kinda different. Also like your word choice of atrophy, that was great. I also liked your descriptions, especially "sunset bleeds through the grass"

Nice job!
Stella Grimshaw chapter 1 . 9/28/2008
Odd piece. I liked it though, the idea of the jack in the box. Good work.
loversdream17 chapter 1 . 9/24/2008
very well done rhyme is very good and rythhim is very well kep and the edescription is great too. Good job.

Mandi(loversdream17)
Militant Poet chapter 1 . 9/23/2008
hm, very interesting indeed...i like the idea of fame and wealth as a poorly played game