Wow, Jae, this is some serious thought at work. I really enjoy how each line of this letter flows into the next without seeming jarring. You've succeeded admirably at not only conveying raw emotion, but capturing it between just a few paragraphs that anyone can relate to. It reads the way it was meant to, as though the author of the letter has an actual voice and is not just in a shadowbox somewhere. You've always had a talent for prose and I hope that you'll continue to bless the online writing communities with your unique insights.

LM

Very...uhm...what's the word...emotional? Gah, I don't know but hopefully you get my point. (lol). Hmm as for input...I can't really think of anything that would help you. Sorry. Lovely work though. (:

~Unknown Survivor~

Interesting. I think the "ya big dork" kinda ruins the tone a bit though. Reminds me of a person I know. Except I don't like her. Is it so hard to have an opinion on SOMETHING? Honestly. Down to icecream flavour. She waits until someone else says something and then agrees with them. Sorry, I'll stop ranting about it now. But yes, good stuff.

Also, I think tha language kinda changed from the beginning to the end...was that intentional? It became more colloquial towards the end, I think.