|Reviews for The Quiet Sound of Pride|
| Otakuami chapter 18 . 11/22/2020
Omg this was so cute. I like the side couple too although the matter seemed a bit over blown after that jock thing but I am glad all of it got solved. Also I loved the little punch lines in her thought process like how life is determined in a filling of bubbles and how things turn out to be way different than we think they would be as.
| ADreamerWithAPen chapter 18 . 9/21/2012
I loved this story! It was an adorable Pride and Prejudice meets modern-day story. One question: was this partially inspired by the manga/anime Special A? That's one of my favorite ones. The competition between the protagonists mimicked that of S.A. Every time Darcy called Elizabeth Number Two, I got the mental image of a smirking Kei calling Hikari "Ni-san". Plus, the whole scene with the first name reminded me of the scene in which Hikari can only call Kei "Takeshima" and so Kei starts making her say all kinds of things with the name Kei in them. Very cute. If you have no idea what I'm talking about because you've never read/watched Special A, just ignore my little fan-girl moment. Anyway, your story was very well-written. Thanks,
| marzmez chapter 18 . 6/12/2011
P&P is one of my most favorite books and I have thought of doing my own story based on it. but then I think again and I get to intimidated. I want to congratulate you on a job well done, and encourage you to go back to this story and refine it some more. It has been a couple of years and I'm sure you have grown as a writer.
| inanelfity chapter 6 . 4/6/2011
("By the way, your coffee sucks!" My self control won that battle and I said nothing more to him.) This was the tipping point.
I admire the creativity employed in TQSoP, the combination of character and setting is nice. However, I think there's a lot more you could do to improve writing style.
One-dimensional characters: Now, TQSoP is pretty much a transplanted AU. To make P&P parodies your own, you need to give characters a twist (Love and Other Accidents by paperclipz, which turns Bingley, Dar and Fitz into rockstars. Sounds cliched, but its sincerely brilliant.) Having Caroline as a straight-out queen bee-tch, Darcy as a snobbish rich-boy, etc is ruining the plot.
Contradictions: I'm mostly referring to early parts of TQSoP. If Lizzy really crushed on Jack, you should introduce him earlier to build up suspense, not have him appear just when you need him. She wouldn't need to think so much, either, she's GLAD to accept. You could have actually worked out a nice bit of jealousy with Lizzy liking Brian, and the rivalry between Kat and her, but I guess that's up to you :) Many paradoxes that didn't quite gel with the storyline, especially the awkward "Number 2" shoehorning. (Do I detect Special A inspiration? ) When my friend calls me No. 2, its after a pretty long friendship, and it takes a while to build up. You don't call someone second place unless you've been in the first for a long time.
these were the major issues :) good luck writing
| Ceri Anne chapter 18 . 11/14/2010
I was supposed to be doing something productive today, like cleaning or something, instead I have sat on my arse all day and read your story. Thank you for sharing this with us, it was wonderfully written! And I especially liked the 3 weddings and a funeral reference at the end!
| rosieroo chapter 18 . 10/8/2010
Hey! I loved the story - i think this should have way more reviews than what it does. It was very cute!
Anyway, i just have to say one thing: you said at the beginning that the only reason Caroline talked to Lizzy was so she could be closer to Darcy and that she had a crush on him (in chapter 4), but later on (in chapter 16) Darcy says that they are cousins.
| WishBlade chapter 6 . 8/18/2010
I like the subtle name changes-we know who the characters are but it's not exactly the same as Pride and Prejudice. Anyway, I shall continue reading now! ]
| WishBlade chapter 2 . 8/18/2010
I just started reading, but I really like it so far!
| Phemonoe chapter 18 . 7/2/2010
Ah, loved it to death :)
| Phemonoe chapter 16 . 7/2/2010
NOW I understand who Caroline is xD I was like, at first, why is she there then? To make Elizabeth jealous? Now I understand, haha. That was stupid of me.
Oh, I like it so far! :)
| Phemonoe chapter 11 . 7/2/2010
Oh, just like Darcy :) Haha, love it.
| Phemonoe chapter 8 . 7/2/2010
Haha, gentleman turned rapist xD Funny. It was a bit sudden, but yeah...
I guess that makes sense. The real Wickham wanted money, and the modern one wanted... yeah.
Woo, Darcy to the rescue :)
As always, good job!
| Phemonoe chapter 6 . 7/2/2010
A bit sudden, the asking out stuff, but I understand what it's about and all: the proposal in the book. Yay :)
And... that's all I have to say. Good job, as always.
| Phemonoe chapter 5 . 7/2/2010
Yay! Wickham! Didn't like him much in the real book, but hopefully your version would portray him better :)
And yes! He asked her :) Now Darcy can become jealous...
Haha, great chapter, as always!
| Phemonoe chapter 4 . 7/2/2010
Once I saw the "She's pretty, but not enough to tempt me" line, I just had to review :) It's a classic Darcy line :D
Haha, anyway, good chapter, as always :)