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![]() ![]() ![]() Natalia's a good actress :) Meh Chris and her need to get back together again -.- -*(Glares)*- |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, I can't wait for the next chapter.:) I wanna see what's going to happen to Chris and Natalia. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! :) I really do but some of the typos/grammar/punctuation mistakes kind of lessen my enthusiasm (sorry :(). Some examples: -I smiled at him, marveling about the way he looked in is suit. It should be: "His suit" - Direct speech errors: e.g.1 "You look great." He told me, looking down at the dress. Should be "You look great," he told me... e.g.2 Natalia. I said, giving her a quizzical look. "Didn't expect to see you here." Should be "Natalia," I said, giving her a quizzical look. "Didn't expect to see you here." - I was the made of honor. Should be "I was the maid of honor." - Punctuation e.g.1 Natalia was sitting there, along with Chris, on Amys side of the church. Should be "on Amy's side of the church." e.g.2 They were closer than I expected they would be, and they, surprisingly, werent glaring at each other. "weren't" I'm sorry I'm being so nitpicky but I just think your story could be improved if you polished it a bit by editing. If you don't have time to edit, and want someone to help out, I'd be happy to read over it before it gets published on FP. Keep up the good work. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww Chris and Nat are both so messed up right now, fix them please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So happy to see an update! Oh I'm loving Chris and Natalia. I love the angst. They are still deeply in love with each other, but yet, past mistakes still haunt them. Trent and Kaitlin I just adore them. I can't wait to see what happens next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yay you finally updated! loved this chapter though I want to read about Katlin's pov more then Natalie's. Anyways update really soon okay? okay. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is realy cute update soon :) |
![]() ![]() seriously are you dead? freak. ugly. cow. update-slacker. meghan redmon. megan 'ugly' redmon. |
![]() ![]() I LIKED YOU MUCH BETTER WHEN YOU USED TO UPDATE LIKE EVERYDAY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hello! I think your story's wonderful. One of the really interesting ones i've read on this site so far! Can't wait to read your other chapters! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw man! I'm loving the NataliaChris moments. Ep! I'm so excited on how their relationship would go!:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh I love the Chris/Natalia story, even more than the Trent/Kaitlyn part! Chris is such an intriguing character! I can't wait for more of this lovely story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() blanc space? ohh well you sure post quick :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() YES! The only thing wrong with this chapter was that it was WAYY to short. But I'm happy with the chapter. Yes, I am the half that want to hear about Natalia and Chris. I just love their story. When I first read about Natalia, I wasn't sure I'd like her character but now I've grown to love her. I like her going to the wedding with him. And the Eric moments. What a wonderful older brother that is protective over his baby sis. I loved chris's comment "Well if I was him, I wouldn't like me either." -Im Just Mlssundaztood |
![]() ![]() ![]() Chris and Nat need to get together soon! |