Reviews for Betrayed
Vanilla Tea chapter 1 . 9/22/2008
Aww, I really like this one, and the lines are short so it reads really well and smoothly. Maybe you should alter the line "And told him" a little, because it sounds like you're going to go on to say what exactly he told him, or you could add punctuation to say that that's the end of the sentence.

Nice job, I love it.