Reviews for Remember That Time?
moongazer7 chapter 1 . 12/19/2008
Hello Broken Winged Bird

I really like it. I think the relationship is really sincere, and I wish it was really that way all the time. It’s really nice. I love the last bit where James was talking to megan with the tender kissing. It was lovely. I however might suggest describing how they look, so readers can imagine the actual sceen. I can imagine a couple doing it, but to actually imagine the people with their description will help your readers picture it like you did. You I am sure want to make your readers comfortable, and that will do the trick. Also to avoid confusion, describe how these characters got to the park, and what they did to arrange it. I am sure you would like to be clear for the readers and yourself in later references, and this will aid you in that area.

Rachel
Grim-Reaper21 chapter 1 . 9/22/2008
It was great. You should keep writing. I can't wait for more.
deletethisaccountplease9 chapter 1 . 9/22/2008
heh, god how I hate my dream world. Yours is scarily similar to mine, and frankly, its creepy how close this was to one of my own dreams. Like... wow. Seriously though, get out of my head!