I really liked this story. It was very cute. Your a great writer. :)

u're really good...i also reviewd your other story...

nice work...keep it up.

It wasn't the best chapter. You could have ended it at the 'i love you's and cut out the epilouge. It seems like you were just trying to squeeze too much out.

How nice, very interesting. It was a good end, I liked how everything sort of worked as the story drew to a close, now that everyone is okay with each other.

Andrew's past was fun to read, but I thought Madeline's was sadder. She's such a nice person now, though. It's also sad that everyone will have to accept the lie that Kate is dead, how terrible. Oh well. I suppose that's just how it's going to have to be, eh?

Great end, I loved it. I'm glad you managed to finish, and the best of luck on your other stories.

Velvet.

Heh, yeah I was kind of wondering what became of everyone else. This was a good chapter, I'm glad you updated, but I have one complaint.

This involves the encounter/fight with Damian. First off, okay, we all see Damien wants to kill Kate and he says why, but to me, it doesn't make much sense. What gift did God give Kate that makes her a barrier in the son of the Devil's way? She didn't display any great abilities besides the fact that she has sweet smelling blood. And how will it be that if he kills her, he'll be able to rule the world and turn everyone into vampires? That doesn't make a lot of sense to me, I'm sorry. Is Kate an angel in disguise? Was she Godsent to save the world? Wouldn't God want to distribute the power just so whoever has it doesn't go crazy?

Now, the fight was okay, albeit short and more or less explained, but it seemed that Damian wasn't putting up much of a fight, especially if he was in full demon form. Wouldn't that give him ultimate power? Even against immortals? Shouldn't he be all powerful, especially if he's a demon? It just seems that he gave in to easily, was staked and burned much to quickly. But that's just an opinion, it's your story.

Though, I must say, I was surprised when it was Damian and not Adrian who turned Kate into a vampire. Rather unexpected. Well, I'll be watching for the next chapter, see what became of the world with Kate missing. Don't give up!

Velvet.

thanks

this is good. The Twilgiht vibe is mostly gone, but some of it lngers. That's perfectly fine, because it is alright to draw inspiration out of a good book that you liked. or movie, or other such things. I really do like it and hope you update soon. No pressure, though.

Wow, this chapter was really in depth. I loved it. Yeah, you really worked it out on Kate's character. I feel so bad, though, to know that it might be the end of her and how she's worrying so much about her family.

Ah, it was good though. THe missing note is an intriguing twist. Hmm, I noticed your reference to your other story. :D That was interesting.

Well, I can't wait for the next chapter. This was good. Velvet.

thanks for the update!

thanks for the chapter! love the story!

Awesome chapter, I loved it. The dream was a little choppy, there was one instance when you mentioned rose petals on the ground and they were sort of out of nowhere.

As for Kate breaking up with Adrian . . . nice. This is going to make for one heck of a plot twist.

Hooray! Kate graduated. The whole orange ordeal made me laugh. It was good. I loved Kate's thoughts for this chapter, they were perfect. Excellent work.

Velvet.

Awesome, an update. It was good, but I want to point out a few things.

First of all, I loved the first two paragraphs. They blew my world away completely. Amazing. The way you portrayed Kate's thoughts was perfect and Lorraine's attitude toward the death of her brother was great.

However, and don't hold me up to this, cause I know I'm not the best writer out there, I saw an instance where you could have added a bit more intensifying detail and thought and emotion. "What if I told you that you could see him one more time?"

Right after the sentence, "She stopped" you could have made Kate realize the gravity of what she had just said. I mean, if you were trying to keep a group of vampires secret from the rest of the world and you had just blurted out something like that, wouldn't you be a little frantic?

Of course, Kate could still agree to take Yasmin, no harm in that. It's just that, I was a little disappointed at that part, I really wanted to see Kate when she was stuck in a tight situation.

Nextly, Yasmin's reaction to seeing her brother. I'll use myself as an example. If someone told me my long dead dog had just returned from the grave and I saw her, I would firstly scream, the thought pet cemetary would come to mind, and then I would run away while screaming louder. Yasmin's reaction was a little too accepting. Sure, she screamed and dove for a table, which was actually very good, but then she just accepted it. I know I would have fainted, at the least.

Okay, here's a part you and I both know you could have done better on. While I'm glad to have the final piece of the mystery, I can't help but feel it was handed right to me. Random piece of paper with the answer? Well, that was anticlimactic. Couldn't Adrian of hinted at it, reminded her that they were going there? Though, it still is sort of a mystery. Perhaps, you did better than I expected and Cape Elizabeth is in fact not the place of her death. (sly smile) It really makes me think.

As for the rest of the story, Kate getting in her dress and having the pictures taken made me laugh. Her family really is a riot. The encounter with Damien was chilling, though, wasn't he a man earlier on? Does being the son of the devil give him awesome appearance changing abilities? As for what Damien will do if Kate tells, we'll just have to see. Adrian trying to break up with Kate was too sad! He's a jerk for even considering it!

Well, until the next chapter. Velvet.

I am gettin ga strong twilight vibe. too many elements are similar to Twilight. it seems that ever since that book came out there hasnt been any truly original vamp stories. Sorry.

Next time better happen soon. It's so aggravating, not knowing what those two letters stand for! Argh!

Good chapter though, I loved it! When Damien came, the part where Kate went: "I became so frightened and at the same time, furious." I don't know why, but that sentence made me get into her thoughts and feelings more. I could actually feel her anger at the outrage!

Aww, poor Henry. He can't run as fast as the others. Thanks for clearing that up though. As for Kate's future, I can only wonder what it will be. We'll see as the battle looms ever closer.

Velvet.

You sounded tired in that little author's note. Hmm. I liked this chapter. Jackson and Vincent are hilarious and I loved Grace and her "Gingy". That was funny.

Uh, there were a bit of mistakes with spacing what people say. Also, you might have someone say something and have another character do something after they say that.

Such as: "Would you eat them if they tasted like blood?' He laughed.

'I still wouldn't eat it.'"

I understand it was adrian saying this, but I would have understood it better if "He laughed" had gone in front of what he said. I don't know, I must be weird that way, but I know a lot of people who write similarly. :*

Well, this was still a good chapter and I really want to know what that code meant and what Damian really wants. Very suspicious.

Keep it up! Velvet.