Hey, this is a good piece of writing! The imagery is great throughout the whole story, and you are consistent in your style.

I would, however, have liked to see it a bit longer. The storyline seemed almost rushed, and the vivid images seemed crammed together. Expand it a bit, and I'll be sure to look it up. This is a great start for a multi-chapter horror story, and seeing it a bit longer would definitely gain you a favorite or two. In conclusion, I see the imagery as pristine and vivid and the storyline intriguing. Just extend it a bit, and you'll be good to go.

~Piewithpancakes

PS: In the second paragraph, I believe you meant "All two "missing persons" reports". ...Sorry if I seem like I'm nitpicking. D: I don't mean to be. *bows respectfully*

That was frightening. There does seem to be a sudden transition between her wanting to get away and never surrender to her giving in?