|Reviews for Hopeless Hope|
| arcane devices chapter 1 . 10/17/2008
I felt that this one was a bit too chunky for my tastes, and with a poem like this the structure was a bit lacking. This had a very broad diction and I found it to still be effective just not to the degree as "Stone".
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 10/4/2008
Wow, really nice piece. I think punctuation would help, but that's just me. I like my punctuation a lot. There's so much in this and it's just full of beautiful imagery and fantastic wording and I love the way you phrased things. Fabulous. Keep writing! :)
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 10/4/2008
"Closer to the age of coming
Around to a tainted way of thinking"
-the line break and lines here arew truly stellar
and i love how fresh this whole thing feels
it hits home :]
| Isca chapter 1 . 10/3/2008
"Beautiful, she descends." I loved that opening line! It captured my attention right away! :)
I don't know what to say, I'm almost in tears, I really really really enjoyed reading this piece! The ending was SO beautiful! :)