Reviews for Landslide
didgeridoo chapter 1 . 7/7/2009
Wow. That was so powerful. I loved the use of italics to separate-what were they? Thoughts? Flashbacks?-from what the character was actually doing. It had an incredible impact on me, and overall, it was very, very good.


Dawn Astoria chapter 1 . 2/15/2009
I also was wondering if there was a purpose to the italics, but overall the wording was well-done.

TuneOut chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
I thought that this was pretty nice. You were able to describe the emotions nicely.

The only thing is that I'm not sure what purpose the italicized sentences served in the long run. The sentences seem like they're addressing someone but in the end, the protagonist is alone.
criti-sized chapter 1 . 1/30/2009
Hm. I don't know exactly what to say about this one. There wasn't anything wrong with it, quite the contrary it was very nice. The fluid emotion that is in it is great, the way that you described everything is great.

Mosaic Stains chapter 1 . 1/29/2009
Nice is the captured word I'm thinking of, that and pity. I feel really sympathic towards the character because she an't seem to get awawy from her past, to continue on. In a lot of sense she reminds me of a tortued animal... So, yeah (my words because I just thought of this), this makes me think it is sweetly nice, definitely softly fluid, and a pitying story.


Oh, before I forget, thanks a bunch for the reviews!
Y.O.O chapter 1 . 1/23/2009
HappinessGal chapter 1 . 11/29/2008
Sad, and well-written. Despite my name, I love to read and write sad things. So when I say it's sad, that is a HUGE compliment!

I liked the style you wrote it in. Thoughts, and actions, and feelings altogether. I really enjoyed it!
Wallflower.x chapter 1 . 11/28/2008
I love this. It's beautiful. Your descriptions are perfect.
Unknown Survivor chapter 1 . 10/23/2008
I can definately relate to this. I really liked your use of italics. Nice job. (:

~Unknown Survivor
SyMph0Ny Of cOloRS chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
That's sad. I understand what that person is going through. In school everyone wants to be popular and well liked even if the popular people aren't real friends. The people who you really care about are left behind. Anyway i like it: it's very angsty.
socks-lost chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
Wow, that was really good. I loved the italics and then non. I think you did an amazing job at depicting change in people but from the person its self. Like i read stuff about people talking about other people changing but never one like this. That's kool. Anyway, Awesome! Keep it up!
x.betweenthelines chapter 1 . 10/13/2008
This is great! It reminds me a little bit of how I use to be. It's beautiful. It really got some emotion out of me. :)
DarkRose1593 chapter 1 . 10/8/2008
This was so good. It almost made me want to cry.
writing-addict77 chapter 1 . 10/5/2008
Wow. That's beautiful. It really makes me think about my life right now...I love it.
ChaosofColour chapter 1 . 10/5/2008
Wow, I really liked it. I love how she was having a conversation with herself... but it was like who she used to be and who she is now, it was really good. :)

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