The story was okay, but next time you might want to cut down on referances from other stories, namely twilight. love the lack of intense angst, though. Maybe a bit more research and promotion of traditional Vampires in this story would have helped a bit, as well as enlongate the final result.

Marquis is HOT! haha, i really liked this, can't wait to read on and see what happens next. You are way better at writing than I am!

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Wow, that is s good story. I agree with Silver, he is indeed a highly stupid Vampire.

I didn't read all of this, but how come all these vampire stories seem to be the same thing? Romance here, romanbce there. There's nothing romantic about vampires. They EAT people. Gosh. They're better when they just eat people, nobody wants to read about your wishful thinking.

nice name for your story ,a vampire game ,thats really cool ,hope you write more chapters a vampires game nice job. I have no words so you can change your story its so good ...

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And I'm also a author here to at this website ,hope you review my story Sunset ,by Grace1o9...