Loved your characters and plot. It is a soppy romance yet full of drama and angst. Thank you for taking the time to share.

OK. I loooooooved this story! It made me cry and laugh and I felt as if I knew the characters personally.

BUT! What happened to Tobias and River and Stephanie? You totally forgot poor little Tobias! And River and Stephanie? Where is their arc? I was all geared up to read more about the there's stories. How Tobias escapes with Amelia and maybe Amelia takes him in. And what did River do to Stephanie. Wasn't River pursuing Hayley? There was quite a big deal about it but you totally ignored both these parts. And what about River and Stephanie at dinner? I was totally psyched to read how they reconcile and River repents and they finally end up together. ㅠ.ㅠ You're cruel, cruel, cruel! I want Tobias' story! The poor boy deserves his story to be heard. To have a happily ever after like Hayley and Riley. Or at least just tell me if Jared killed him or not.

i want deliah and jayson's storyyyyyyy!i don't care about their son actually!
i really liked the story
i hope to see the rest of the characters in their respective stories!

i loved this story a lot and truly wished that evrybody's story could be developed!because i really liked jason and daliah's story!and grace too
i think i'll re read it soon
wondefull story!

Ahhhhhhhhh. I loved it.

I like the premise of the story looking forward to reading the rest

Wow, this was a wonderful story! You are an amazing writer. I can't wait to read the other stories. I really hope you write them.

Awesome!

I like the concept, but I think she needs to have a bit more character. Why does she hate David for accidentally hitting her, but doesn't hate Jarred after all he's done to hurt her and her mother? A lot of things she does and says don't make any sense ...

OMG! I really liked this story! Keep up the good job!

Aw, this one was really sweet!

I'll tell you what I like (and don't) in this fic:

-I like the approach of the subject and the original beginning of the story. It is well built.

-I like the way you write, the sentences are complex enough, not to look like first grade narration. Way better than other simpler ones that in the end turn out being dull.

-I like the characters, I hope they develop a little more. It's good to see a male main character that's not the "perfect prince charming" since the beginning.

-I don't like... anything for now :)

Loved it

I like the story but i think the ending is a bit cliche or unnesacery...since Haley and Riley's 'arranged marriage' is to keep her safe, it is no longer needed because Jared is dead. Instead they should go thru college and then get married after. Even tho they truly love each other, it is pointless for them to get married. I feel like you could have made it more creative by braking the marriage, but then they just actually date. and thne in epilogue like years later they marry.

Oh my god this is so sweet and now I'm fuckin crying all over the place like a fool and my mum is laughing at how ridiculous I sound (as opposed the telling me shut up). I always saw this story and passed it, but I finally decided to click it today and I haven't a bit of remorse that I did. This was awesome and NOW I shall add it to my favorite's list.

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