|Reviews for More senses|
| Kyllorac chapter 1 . 12/7/2008
Another questioning poem. I like. :3 It makes me wonder where all those figures of speech came from.
"You smell food being cooked, / and you imagine what's being cooked." The second "cooked" feels a bit jarring because it's too close to the first "cooked". I suggest finding a synonym for "cooked" or rephrasing the line so that the cook's are of different tenses.
I liked the imagery. It was very straightforward, which fit this poem perfectly. Also, the words you used were very simple. This really added to the straightforward feel.
So, overall, another poem I enjoyed. n_n