|Reviews for Suicide or murder?|
| Kyllorac chapter 1 . 12/9/2008
Freebie Review 3/5
I loved the imagery in this. It's so blunt and raw. I particularly adored "The desolate rope of life, / frayed, tearing, falling apart."
I think that "someone to help her, / someone to save her," would work a little better than what you have currently. It would make a sharper contrast with "someone to end her misery."
Again, you made good use of repetition. There is enough present to lend a rhythm and emphasis, but not so much that it is aggravating. n_n
Flow, overall, was also fairly smooth. Experimenting with the punctuation in places (such as "And yet,") could work to enhance the flow/lend emphasis further.