Haha, this was really funny, especially the rambling :D :D :D I love it!

Even though this is short and fluffy, I can sense that you've put lots and lots of effort into characterizing Lucas and Sarah. Sarah is sweet but not Mary Sue-ish, so I can understand why Lucas is so obsessed with her. I can visualize Lucas as a lovesick little puppy, yet he isn't afraid to confess his feelings and then kiss Sarah.

"of course i have feelings! i've got tons of 'em" BEST line ever. Very cute story!

Oh my God! That was so terribly cute! I loved it )

I LOVE this challenge, because it has produced the best work! Any chance of a sequel? Lucas is hilarious when he rants!

I loved this; it's so fun to watch a guy crack! And that promt has produced some of my favorite one-shots! Marvelous job.

This is os funny and sweet, man. I love it. Especially the beast thing, it's good. But the taxi part? Not so good. You could at least have made it more dramatic.

very, very cute

hee, that was cute! I love the whole Harry Potter comparison too. You write the whole guy voice very well and I thought this was an excellent response to the challenge! Very nice job.

haha, bran muffin vs. chocolate cupcake...I'm still laughing at that :)

FIRST REVIEW, FIRST REVIEW, FIRST REVIEW! Yay. I love being first.

Right, well I didn't review to say that. I reviewed (am reviewing... gah, stupid grammar... who really cares about tense?) to say that I LOVE THIS STORY.

Now I have read quite a few of this challenge (I guess because I'm automatically drawn to the unresolved sexual tension, which really is, resolved but whatevs trevs), but I love how you combine the male perspective with the situation. It's so cute. Like, I totally didn't see that Sarah was chasing Lucas, because Lucas wouldn't necessarily see it like that.

It was so refreshing. I almost feel, though, that the I love you was to early, but there is not much you can do about that is there? Because the rest of the line works really well in that context.

And I loved the Harry Potter references (even though I was much too unhappy with the conclusion of that story) I can kind of better understand the Harry/Ginny relationship (I do remember something about a beast). But Harry Potter is another issue, and shouldn't really be discussed in this review.

Man. You say this is your only one-shot. Which suck, cause I really want to read more. Maybe you have some complete stories. I'm off to check it out.

Keep writing though, it's FANTASTIC.

Jen.