|Reviews for The WTF Journal of Thalia Evans|
| BreizyBreeze chapter 1 . 11/13/2008
This story/journal thingy is trippin me out!
(2)Lauging out loud
My fav part:
Eragon: (Climatically leaps forward(2))
N Thalia: (CRACK)
Eragon: (falls face first onto ground)
Thalia: So sunny-side or over-easy, your choice.
Eragon: Sob, sob.
Lina: Is he…crying?
Emy: Geeze what a pussy! How the hell did he get to be a dragon-rider if he can’t even eat a friggin egg?
Thalia: Does anybody have any cheese, I think this bread would taste really good with cheese.
2. In slow motion!(3)
3. Slow motion is epic
(2)Lauging My Ass Off
Keep up the good/hilarious work!
| WillWriteForFood chapter 17 . 11/7/2008
You're too funny for your own good.
| WillWriteForFood chapter 8 . 11/7/2008
lol. We were gonna watch fight club. Ha ha ha. Cam Gigandet is still some sexy awesome something that I don't know what to do with.
| WillWriteForFood chapter 7 . 11/7/2008
Love the dialogue. Keep it coming.
| WillWriteForFood chapter 6 . 11/7/2008
What is pong?
| WillWriteForFood chapter 5 . 11/7/2008
lol, love ollie's comment. It's really cute this story. I like how the portal moved to her underwear drawer, so she had to borrow undies. lol. This is why we keep a spare pack of panties in our purse (lol, that's something my grandmother would say because she likes to store things in her purse. I swear, there's no need for a mall when your own grandmother has the mall in her bag.)
| WillWriteForFood chapter 4 . 11/7/2008
Randomness is bliss, I tell yah. Keep her entries funny, short and sarcastic. But also, you could put a little bit more words than.
| WillWriteForFood chapter 3 . 11/7/2008
I love the entries. They're cute and random, and I love the fact that someone is "the book whore." I wouldn't blame her. Guys in books are way good looking.
| Will Cab chapter 8 . 11/7/2008
This is becoming weirder and weirder... I like it. I like how the reality and fantasy seem to mix in this diary, which makes it seem that the MC is unreliable...
| baisi chapter 3 . 10/22/2008
I LOVE EDWARD CULLEN!
| inkspatters chapter 7 . 10/19/2008
Haha, I was right, she's the sort of person who doesn't like things that she can't win at, lol. Nice way of backing up what happened last chapter this chapter, I really liked that reinforcement.
I still don't understand about the portals and am a little bit too confused to be continuing. However, I really do like how you've developed the voices of Lina and Emy here it makes the story/diary more interesting :D Lina sounds funny.
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| inkspatters chapter 6 . 10/19/2008
Again, what is the portal? I'm really confused by this strange and mysterious portal, please enlighten me.
Ahaha, I love how you have that she you lost at everything but pong and then made a note of the fact that pong is awesome. It reveals something about your character. Everything that you suck at is bad. Nice development.
Also, I have a question, is this your real journal?
| inkspatters chapter 5 . 10/19/2008
Haha, as usual you've managed to be absolutely funny, which I loved. After all, the main purpose of story telling is to entertain, which you are doing.
However, I don't quite understand this thing with the portal. What is it? I think it requires an explanation and I don't like how everything feels so up in the air at the moment.
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| inkspatters chapter 4 . 10/19/2008
What is the Noodle Incident? I'm so interested. And what Portal? It seems that there is a fantasy twist to this realistic diary. Very interesting stuff, I'm liking this touch of fantasy.
Well, I like how this chapter is taking the story in a totally different direction, but I don't like how it's so short and has left me in suspense. Gah.
Good work, though,
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| inkspatters chapter 3 . 10/19/2008
I like the reference to popular culture, because I feel that it adds authenticity. The whole vampire craze is most certainly huge at the moment and it would definitely be in someone's diary if they were keeping one. Very realistic.
I also liked the little scene that you wrote, because the girls' conversation was interesting and funny.