Reviews for Promise
BeforeThePrologue chapter 4 . 11/10/2013
BeforeThePrologue chapter 3 . 11/10/2013
Nice chapter, the tension was great. I think I'm really going to like some of these new characters...
BeforeThePrologue chapter 2 . 11/10/2013
Oh dear...
BeforeThePrologue chapter 1 . 11/10/2013
Excellent beginning. I truly hope that this story will not disappoint.
TalkingFish chapter 32 . 10/7/2013
This. This is absolutely amazing, no doubt. Your writing and choice of words are just wonderful! But you can't just leave us there! What will happen once Roane finds Aeleisa? Will Aeleisa not become Caeleb's queen? I love Caeleb's character, but Aeleisa & Roane just belong together. I really hope you'll upload book three soon. I promise to shower it with everlasting adoring praise, haha!
Nimrunya chapter 32 . 9/24/2013
Dropping in to send words of encouragement your way and to let you know that you still have (new) readers!

I made an account just to review this story (and, by association, Chosen). I spent the last few days engrossed in these two stories, unable to put them down. I hope you find the time and inspiration to continue Aeleisa's story; I understand how hard it is to work on something for as long as you have worked on these stories! Life has a way of doing that :)

But your update in your profile gives me hope. I look forward to seeing an update from you soon!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/4/2013
I have never been compelled to write a review before. I usually just read and that's it. This is my first time reviewing, so bear with me please.

Let me just say, YOU ARE AN AMAZING AUTHOR! Like wow. Your writing takes my breath away. No joke. I'm literally at the edge of my seat while I read your book. I read Chosen and Promise in two days. I honestly can't believe I only found your story now! I couldn't stop reading because I was hooked. I stayed up past 3 am just to finish this book. And I am speechless.

This is one of the best stories I have ever read in fiction press. Authors like you are hard to find! With your excellent grammar and excellent plot line, I really admire you.

Can I just rant for a while? Okay, yeah, I am REALLY annoyed at aelessia for not realizing her feelings for Roanne. I just.. UGH! I can't. Calaeb is just so sweet and kind and he'd make a great king. He deserves someone who will love him FULLY! Not just someone who is fond of him. I mean, why can't aelessia tell him that she doesn't love him because she loves Roanne? It's just like Hayden all over again! Hayden did the right thing by telling aelessia that he didn't love her. It hurt her, of course. But he knew that she deserved someone who loved her COMPLETELY. And through that hurt, she was able to move on and she found Roanne. WHY DOES SHE HAVE TO THINK ROANNE IS DEAD? :(( but yeah, she should do the same for Calaeb. He would be hurt at first, but in the end it's for the best.

SO YES. I'm really excited for your next book. Please please update soon! I'm excited to see what would happen when they finally reunite-Roanne and aelessia.

Btw, I hate sulqin. Okay, that just had to come out. I'm sorry. Of course, I pity her- i mean, no one deserves unrequited love. But still! SHE'S SO SELFISH AND SICK. If she really loved Roanne, why would she take advantage of him when he was obviously distressed. Especially the part when you mentioned that she found pleasure that they were doing the deed on Alesia's bed and room! That is just sick and hateful of her. I'm annoyed by her jealousy. I honestly kind of hopped and shipped her with Quentinn.

Okay, I'm going to stop now or else I'll continue rambling nonsense.

Just PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE publish your next book! I know you're busy, but you many have anxious (like me!) readers awaiting your next update. You're an amazing author and your talent should be recognized! What better way to showcase your talent than by posting the next book of "promise"? (*nudge nudge* subtle hint *nudge*)

Haha anyway! LOVE your story! And I hope you continue it (in the near future!)

And thank you for sharing this story with us. I'm glad I found it. :)

As Roanne would say..

..until we meet again.

Hehe bye!
Forever Siriusly Sirius chapter 32 . 3/9/2013
Oh god no Aeleisa! I ship her with Roane so much it hurts, and I just want to scream because her and roane are witty banter, fire, passion, sarcasm, life, but her and caleb are just sweet, comfortable, safe and if only she knew roane was alive! Anhh *cries* Gods alive please I know you're busy but I am dying like literally dying to know what happeneds.

Sulqin actually annoys be, being honest. She's selfish, vindictive , jealous and the pleasure she got from having roane in aeleisa's bed is kind of sickening.

Aeleisa's mother, is the original bride of the King? And she came from Benoit (forgive all my terrible spellings, I can never remember!) them surely Aeleisa has legitimate claim to the throne of Beniot? Or not, because that family is no longer in power...but of people found out who she really was, and realises her mother was a royal princess...would she have claim to the theone? Would she be accepted if she did? Questions questions...

Ha! I knew there was magic involves, Aelesia and her flower thing, and if her mother is royal it explains how she has her gift.

and those pills making her hair change colour, her father is the man who haunts the Kings nightmares...interesting. So her father was captain of the Royal Guards, and the first traitor and then the next like 3 captains after him were traitors too.

I ship Maryn/Michaela! He doesn't have another love interest and I sure as hell aint shipping him and Gisela!

So- Quentin, is Remmy's son, by the last name, and so is roane? And Remmy knows Aeleisa's aunt & uncle who aren't really her aunt and uncle, her mother was a royal and her father was captain of the guards

Guess girls really do marry their fathers eh.

I love this story, i did not see a blood debt to beniot coming! In fact i rarely saw anything that happened comong

This is brilliant
Every word of it is brilliant
Amazing job :)
mt chapter 32 . 9/21/2012
I have just finished your two books, and I am finding that I never want it to end! This tale is so breathtaking and beautiful, and I can't wait for the next... When is that btw ? :P Please, never stop writing, you have a true talent.
cadencegirl1992 chapter 32 . 8/27/2012
I hope you post more! I want to read more! You are an awesome writer.
OneLastEndeavor chapter 32 . 5/24/2012
So we've reached the end! Wow, I have to say that I'm impressed you've written two full-length stories here. I mean, that in and of itself is an accomplishment...I somehow never get that far. :/

Anyway, I enjoyed that last chapter. Roane FINALLY left. I felt that his departure was dragging a bit. I'm curious to see what's going to happen to the whole love...square? I mean the whole Aeleisa/Roane/Sulqin/Caeleb deal.

I also think that the transition you made from the book she was reading to a dream was neatly done.

Are you slowly writing out Hayden? If so, I must say: thank God. I know you don't like him as a character. I never did either and it's getting kind of tedious to read about him and Leina. Part of me wonders why he's even in the story to begin with. He could just as easily Aeleisa's first love, lost contact with her after her declaration and then just not make an appearance at all. I mean really, does every character need a love interest? My advice would be to give him more of an important role or cut him out completely because I feel like he currently serves no purpose...and his story is just taking up precious room.

Finally, I loved how it came around full the story with a promise being broken and how it's finishing with a promise being made. I'm glad she said makes it so much more dramatic and definitely makes me want to keep reading.

Now that the story's finished, I can finally review on the overall plot! So here goes.

Alright so...I feel like this story needs more of a climax and action. I understand that it's not action/adventure sort of deal but really, I felt as though much of the conflict had been resolved by chapter 23 or so, which made the last 10 chapters a bit...disconnected from the rest of the story. There really wasn't any sort of BANG, major problem, and swift resolution here. I understand it's the 2nd book (and 2nd books are always hard, aren't they?) but I felt as though there was build-up for something that didn't happen.

Which brings me to another point that I touched on before. It definitely felt like the last couple chapters were dragging. It's like I was sitting in front of the characters, watching them think through all their emotions and it was-for lack of a better word-unexciting. I feel that it's better to show the character's emotions as they're doing something rather than engaging in inner monologue while they're just sitting around, staring at flowers, or horses, or whatnot. I hope that made sense?

ANYWAY, this is a really long review. So I'm going to leave it here. I hope my criticism isn't too harsh. Definitely keep on writing. As far as style goes, I think you're a good writer.

I look forward to reading the third installment! I can't wait to see how this all plays out. :)
dreamgazer220 chapter 32 . 5/9/2012
I will review your last chapter, just because ) Your writing has grown so much from when you first started the story as "Serve" back on Quizilla. Yep, I remember those days. (Because I am crazy, or dedicated, or whatever.) And you probably already know this, but you inspire me a lot, and I'm saddened that we've grown apart a little bit because of college and life; but I'm glad that you're still writing and that we've connected. I wish you luck in exploring the next installment of Aeleisa and Roane's lives and adventures, keep us posted & don't fall off the face of the Earth ;)

Love you!
dreamgazer220 chapter 31 . 5/9/2012
Oooh, Aeleisa, what have you done? I guess I should've seen this coming, but you wrote it in such a way that the end was still a surprise. This was a sad chapter, though... but it was good. I enjoyed it. I really hope that we can learn more about Aeleisa's past in the future, since we still only know snippets of it. Well done! I can't believe it's over... for now. Roane will be crushed when he finds out (
TheDarkestThing chapter 30 . 3/31/2012
This is such a great story ! I really do very hope you update soon!
sophiesing chapter 30 . 3/17/2012
Omg you updated! Everytime you update I get sooo happy, you've just made my day. Ugg I wish Roane would just find Aeleisa already.

Another well written chapter,

I can't wait for the next one!
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