Reviews for Swing Set Symphony
Isca chapter 1 . 1/28/2010
I like that "Whoosh! Whoosh!" is onomatopoeic; it really enhances the swing imagery.

"Pebbles caught between the buckles." Striking image. Very creative. Wow. :)
OrangeConeDramaQueen chapter 1 . 11/3/2009
Cute, very poetic. Reminds me of my childhood as well.
Thomas Rex chapter 1 . 10/15/2008
It seems to me that

"Whoosh!

Whoosh!"

might work marginally better, but likely not significantly enough to change it.

Were this my memory, it might be something more like "Crack-whoosh; groan-squeak!" Ah the joys of hours on thew swingset...