|Reviews for Staying Away|
| deefective chapter 1 . 10/18/2008
Oh wow. I can feel the emotion coming off of this piece. It oozes.
You've created a pathos for the victim right here with the whole idea of your piece. Nicely done also because this is well written. Not only that but the rhyming doesn't sound forced either. It actually adds to the overall effect. Especially that last line. Good job.
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| deletethisaccountplease9 chapter 1 . 10/15/2008
Wow... I must admit, that is scary. How many years are you guys apart? I mean, if she is like 9, and you are like 15, then c'mon, you can take her. But if the years are any closer, yeah, start running. Has this ever happened before? I mean, like my brothers tick me off to the extreme (especially when they jump on chairs to escape from me) so I know how you feel, but she is your 'little' sister for a reason. She has to learn from YOU. And im really sorry if that sounds insensitive. I really dont know to what degree she is bipolar.
Other than that! great poem as always. As I have said, I love the thought you put in it, and the great rhyming patterns.