|Reviews for Feed|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
I like the format with the short lines and the italics, it definitely emphasizes the urgency. I did think you went overboard with the ellipses it was just too much all over the place. I do like the back and forth between his emotions, it works well.
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| KLSmith chapter 1 . 10/16/2008
that was awsome you should contunie