Reviews for Find Me A Forget Me Not
LostInMe chapter 1 . 4/19/2009
A beautiful piece! Really very lovely.

I guess I sort of see what you mean about the last two stanzas - well, not really the last stanza; there's nothing wrong with it, except maybe the second line that doesn't flow 100 percent perfectly. But the second-to-last stanza, I kind of see what you're trying to say. When read aloud, "goddess" ends up with the accent on the second syllable instead of the first. You hear it? That might be what's bothering you. Just a guess, I don't know if that's it.

The point is, the poem is simply wonderful, and any imperfection is totally unnoticeable by most people, unless one is searching hard for them. So please stop worrying. It's an excellent piece!
chartonjeremiah chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Actually, I really like the last two stanzas as well. I think the whole poem would have been the weaker without them.

...Now can I have the cyber cookies? ;)
Isca chapter 1 . 10/18/2008
You know, I actually liked the last two stanzas the best :)

I loved how you used a different flower at the beginning of each stanza. Beautiful idea!

P.S. Yay for cyber cookies :P
XDelvokX chapter 1 . 10/17/2008
I believe that only the last stanza is out of place. The rest seem to connect together in a respectable way.

Overall, a good poem making use of rhyme scheme and meter. Good job.

Good lines:

Search your mind and find me there

A broken memory.

Sin will overthrow the sun

Shadows so divine.

Weaker lines:

Lay a Daisy at my head

Its virtue shall resound

She’s taken me away from you

Fooled by all her guile.

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