"Having a heartbeat to lull me to sleep would be spectacular." Is it bad that I laughed when I read that line? I don't mean that in a bad way; I like the fact that it made me happy.

The last two lines are sweet and sincere. :)

No one really knows.

oh. i like D

My fingers are freezing.

"Does she not deserve a chance?" I like how this final line leaves it up to the reader to decide whether the girl is worthy of love or not.

"Beat me to a pulp." Fascinating!

"Just wait until my carcass is cold." Oh, very mysterious and chilling!

"The place you have rested inside my heart has burned, collapsed, and died." Raw emotion here! Heart-breaking!

"At least you're happy." Aww, that's so sad!

GREAT WORK! :)

i'm not.

i still add to favourites, rather than review. Silly fp designers muddling my braincell.

your pieces always feel sad.

bit of both, perhaps.

"But we learn to leap; to fly." Powerful message.

"And you knew how to make me feel alive." A lump just rose in my throat. *Tear* What a beautiful line! :)

"The flip of a heart..." I like how love is considered 'luck' or 'chance' here.

"Maybe this is closure." Forceful! Intense! Full of angst!

I think you put "a" where you meant "I" in the second verse.. not sure though

I love this piece.

Pretty

"You wouldn't know me, if I was standing right in front of you." Ouch. That line is so harsh. It's wonderful though; really captures the angst.

"You'd never know me if I came up and slit your throat." WOW! Striking imagery! :)