|Reviews for September|
| Aster Eris chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
This definitely captures the feeling of returning to school after the summer. Really great poem, and I love the beginning and ending lines. The only part that I would confusing was "The life seeps out from beneath/Its eyes lidded with exhaustion". I wasn't entirely whose eyes this was referring to, unless it was the fog's eye. Really good imagery and everything though.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
"Its eyes lidded shut".. .I really like that line, the play on words is really great and unique.
I like how the first and last line are the same, it ties the piece together very well. I also like your word choices, they are very good words. The whole piece is interesting. Nice job.
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| sharks don't sleep chapter 1 . 10/19/2008
I am at a point when I hate school and am overdramatic, so I do like this quite a bit. :P
I like that it begins and ends in the same way and that whole thing is sort of steeped in a feeling of complete and utter disatisfaction/dullness (not writing-wise!). I can almost see a picture going along with this... or something.
I don't know. To me, this is a scene in slow motion of just any other day that just happens to be the first day of something entirely un-new and un-exciting.
I don't think this review makes much sense at all. Sorry.