aw...what an amazing story! It nearly made me cry. and that's a huge thing - 'causeI almost never cry at stories and books...

Ryan was awesome

this was a great story nd awesome grammer!:P

The story is well proportioned in terms of dialogue-to-description, and the paragraphs have a clear flow to them. However, some of the characters' emotions seem somewhat forced - if Emma and Ryan were truly so close before, then their fallout doesn't seem perfectly realistic. Neither does his sister's treatment towards her.

This story's weakest point, though. is all the smuggling/gang stuff. It's not convincing. The smugglers don't actually seem to know what they're talking about. This is one area which could really be benefitted by some research.

Nice story. Could have been better if you had more chapters and what happened to Tony. But other than that, it was awesome!

Short and sweet. Though touching as well. Thanks for the good read.

This was very sweet. I definitely liked it, but where did she learn to shoot a gun?

Love,

Becca

why don't you make an epilogue ?

like their wedding&kids ?

PLEase?

oh and i love this story so much

Wow. That was really good..and so painfully saddening. It was so different from what I usually read but it was good. I wished it was longer though, but it was still good ) Emma is brave and I have to say, props for Jillian. If I was in her situation, I don't know if I would have been able to forgive Emma that easily. But then again, I don't know the bond that they shared so yeah...Loved the story ) Good job!

love it. :D

let me finish crying so i can review...

AWESOME STORY!

Wow that was good. Thanks for a completely different kind of story, you really know how to write!

wow this was really interesting to read...good job :)

I absolutely loved this fic for a couple reasons.

The first is that not many people can built such strong involvement of emotion in such a short amount of time. Right during chapter 1 I was completely hooked in. I felt so familiar with it, as if I had been reading this fic since long before. Also, while it normally takes having to fill in previous events to your chapter 1 by using several chapters, with a few paragraphs you already had the story rolling, and the readers filled in.

Congratulations on a job well done and for the reasons mentioned above, I had favourited this! D

gulistanlik

something different to what i normally read. but it definitely had drama! i

I was literally in tears by the end of this. Absolutely wonderful writing. Thank you.