|Reviews for With The Music|
| AdooreKhwab chapter 26 . 5/31/2013
Thanks Allison. Sucks to hear about the relapse but I understand you had to make it somewhat real. I'd like to read about the other band members, not necessarily at the same time frame this story was written. Maybe another time but I'd like to read about them. I don't think I've told you this but really, Quinn's 'mother' is a horridly evil bitch. I felt like bitch-slapping her myself in that chapter. Gosh, I wish Quinn did it. Now all I feel is pent-up anger. That's a good sign cos you make your readers feel. You are good. And I will check out the writer you beta for :)
| AdooreKhwab chapter 24 . 5/31/2013
I KNEW it was the mother. 1st from what Tyler said. And 2nd from the time she typed that letter. I just had that INKLING. And I was RIGHT :) Gotta tell you, you reduced me to tears at the part where Quinn went to Tyler (not in this chapter).
| AdooreKhwab chapter 10 . 5/30/2013
This story is so interesting & they are so sweet that I'm sacrificing my homework just to read this :) :$ So far, things seem a little dreamy therefore, I predict that a fight or something like that isn't so far away.
| AdooreKhwab chapter 4 . 5/30/2013
Ryder... Ryder... Sigh. Great chapter. Some mistakes here & there. You might want to look through & correct them :)
| AdooreKhwab chapter 1 . 5/30/2013
I didn't think this chapter sucked tho I felt that you failed to introduce the band members plus derek properly.
| displacedfemale chapter 13 . 5/16/2013
Aah, I'm glad that Quinn is getting along with Ryder's family so well, even if she is super hesitant and unsure of herself and the whole socialisation thing.
I'm not so sure that Ryder meeting her family is going to be as smooth sailing as this though.
| macy8 chapter 5 . 5/5/2013
i love this story is far and i cant wait to finish it
| M. Suzanne chapter 1 . 4/19/2013
Someone knows their Austin, lol. This is the first story I've read that has a setting in Austin - very awesome!
| MzGottaLottaMoney chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
Awwwww! Cute story...I love it! I really enjoyed it...great job! :-)
| Angelbaby1991 chapter 26 . 3/11/2012
Loved Your Story.
| Dreamzzdreamer chapter 13 . 12/30/2011
Favorite chapter so far! Loving the story!
| AJS chapter 26 . 12/21/2011
I was excited to read this story since I'm a sucker for the whole fame cliche, but after reading this, I have some issues with this story. The first is that there was no progression/build up of the relationship between Ryder and Quinn. One chapter he was eyeing her like a piece of ass and the next he was proclaiming his love for her and that he had never met another girl who caught his attention like she did. There was just no middle ground, no development of those feelings, no reason for the sudden attraction to love. There was also no showing of Quinn's feelings for Ryder until they actually got together. It was just suddenly like she was agreeing that she felt the same when there had been no previous mention of her reciprocating any of those feelings aside from admitting that Ryder was hot. Furthermore, later on in the story Ryder proclaims that he knew Quinn was the one from the moment he laid eyes on her, when really all he thought of when he first saw her was that she had a nice ass and he'd like to get her in bed. I guess I failed to see how Quinn went from being a good lay to someone Ryder wanted to spend the rest of his life with.
The other problem I had with this story was how fast their relationship went, or just in terms of the steps that they took. Engagement, marriage... they clearly had SO many issues they hadn't resolved between the two of them, and yet they were already talking about eloping to Vegas to get married. I understand that once you find that person, you just want the rest of your life to start right then and there, but maybe it's because I'm too sensible but I think it was way too fast. I think this was also sort of addressed in the story, but then it was dismissed when I didn't think it should have been. You have to know how to love and fix yourself before you can turn to establishing a strong relationship, let alone the rest of your life, with someone else. Ryder definitely needed to have fixed his own alcohol problem before marrying Quinn. He also needed to have learned how to be comfortable enough with Quinn to open up to her and share his problems with her, before they could even think about engagement. The way I see it, the only thing that was driving them toward engagement was that they were in their honeymoon phase of their relationship and they didn't really have the foundation to take it further. I also think that their relationship wasn't very healthy. The fact that they couldn't stand to be apart from each other for just a few days is unhealthy, and is also very much like the honeymoon phase of the relationship. In the end love isn't about needing to spend every second with the person you love. You should be able to go about your daily activities without that, and neither Quinn nor Ryder were able to.
Lastly the characters seemed a bit one-dimensional. Quinn's mother never changed and was just kind of gotten rid of in the end, and Ryder's dad was a bastard who hadn't learned anything during his 15 years in jail. This just seemed way too unrealistic to me. Quinn's mother's intentions for leaking the news to the public also lacked motivation. Quinn is still tied to her family in name, so it doesn't make sense that Marla would go after her own daughter and further tarnish their family name. If anything, it would have made more sense if she had ruined Ryder's reputation instead. The timing is also a little weird - how could she have known that Ryder went out and got trashed the night before? How did she know when to release the information, that they had gotten married, etc? There just seeemed to be a lot of holes and the whole thing was unrealistic.
I also don't like how the ending became Quinn's fault when she didn't really do much wrong. Quinn heard what was on the news, knew what she had seen the night before, and Ryder basically confirmed it. It's not a lack of trust that would lead her to suspect that Ryder would leak everything. He was piss drunk. It's not like she was even accusing him of cheating. Therefore it's pretty unfair that Ryder, the guys, and Ryder's family shunned her after she left, when she was forced to leave because it was her job. I don't understand what else they could have expected her to do, and I don't like how in the end only she was the one who was apologizing, and Ryder didn't utter a single "sorry."
| jst me chapter 26 . 11/1/2011
I really loved this story ur an amazing writer with great detail
| Kathleen Moon chapter 26 . 10/30/2011
Fantastic story...it kept me away from my homework. I enjoyed it very much! Your characters were very enjoyable, the plot strong, and you obviously knew what you were doing. Keep writing!
| The Imagination Addict chapter 26 . 10/18/2011
i like how you briefly mention his relapses, implying that she stood by him and supported him the whole time. after all, love's about supporting each other and trying to be a better person. and they're both doing that together.
nice ending too!