Reviews for on the bus
sunday night sky chapter 1 . 2/13/2009
wow! as i read the first few lines, i was unsure about the repetition of 'sitting on the bus', but then i realised it had a point, it was integral to the story. i love how it builds up to the end. wonderful suspense building ]
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/20/2008
I really like the ending, it wasn't expected. I also like the way you described each step so specifically. The only thing is the repetition got to be a bit much in that first stanza, especially with the word thinking. In that stanza though the way you described how you knew he wasn't still in love with you was really great. Such little things, but so important.
winteria chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
Beautiful. I love the flow, from beginning to end. This is just gorgeous.
Yellow Duvet chapter 1 . 10/22/2008
I love it. Simple and sweet.

:D
lymli chapter 1 . 10/22/2008
wow, amazing, I like the ending, love is always full of questions.
Harsh Notes chapter 1 . 10/21/2008
I liked it. I wanna know what happens next.
kit feral chapter 1 . 10/20/2008
okay, wow.

love.

i am thinking about how much you say you love me.

LOVE.

this is brilliant, and i get it, and i'm so excited i'm forgetting my capitals.

seriously, wow.
october lies chapter 1 . 10/20/2008
this describes me, my thoughts, my ideas, and not my lack of action. i like this a lot.