Reviews for I Love You
moongazer7 chapter 1 . 12/14/2008
Good emotions, but the seen was an unrealistic one. A child has no business in a war zone. You might like to explain how they got there, so there is no confusion. Being clearer makes you a good writer as readers understand you. You also can receive less questions to answer. Also for all your pieces, describe your characters and how they look. You will find it creates a clearer picture in people’s mind, and thus people will stay and read your stories.
Asphodel21 chapter 1 . 10/24/2008
Hey, nice one! D D
Imminent Threat chapter 1 . 10/23/2008
All right! Good essay.
Winterblazewolf chapter 1 . 10/22/2008
Interesting story. D Not bad.