|Reviews for October|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/20/2008
"Uniform greens blossom,/their spirits are slowly crushed by their own glamour."... I think maybe a semicolon would be better instead of a comma?
"the pure joy and the debilitating sadness of it all."... I don't think you need that second the there. It's a bit wordy and repetitive.
I like this piece. Your descriptions are really great, very bittersweet. I also think you used punctuation and line breaks well.
| Inactive9999 chapter 1 . 10/26/2008
I had to concentrate a lot reading it, but it makes one look even closer at the great content :-)
Beautifully written! Fall's my favourite season of the year because of its melancholy and quiet sadness - and I think you caught that perfectly!