"Will you kiss me fiery?" is probably my favorite line.

It's a very beautiful poem, and I like the rhyme scheme you have going on here. Keep up the good work!

This was beautiful! :)

Nothing has tugged on my heartstrings lately as much as this has. You're truely a poetic individual. This poem has beauty dripping from every word and every image. Great job!

I liked the last verse the best. Nice job on this piece. (:

~Unknown Survivor

Okay, so the first thing I got out of this poem is that the rhyme scheme is inconsistant, which then made me wonder if it was intentional. was just distracting.

Anyway, other than that, I thought this was a very nice poem.

I liked the first line. Your phraze "frozen lips" was a good hook because it made me wonder why they were frozen. The contrast to this later with "kiss me fiery" as also interesting.

I also liked the second stanza. The separation of this by giving it only three lines was interesting, I liked the repition of "always goes." The way you wrote it, it almost read like a sigh.

The only other thing that I didn't like was the line "Will you kiss me fiery?" You stuck a future conditional in with present (or something like that. Sorry, I only know tenses in Spanish :P) It was an interesting line, but it sounded weird.

Nice work. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this :)

Beautiful.