Reviews for quest
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
I like the way you split the stanzas. It made the thoughts very succinct and distinct, which also helped create a strong rhythm.

I also like the last line. It's sort of like an echo of the previous stanza, which creates a feeling of continuance. Nice way to end this.

[looking for love

in a brittle forest of bones]

I like the imagery here, but the rhyme didn't work very well and threw off the restof the rhyme scheme.

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 11/11/2008
I like the rhyme scheme. Rhyming every otehr stanza is different, not something I see very often on fp. I also think your rhymes are good, not forced or anything.

Your punctuation bothered me a tad. You use the question mark and then that period at the end, but no peried after the first tell me? I didn't like that.

The piece is great, your descriptions are different and interesting. I also like the title. Nice job.
012323232 chapter 1 . 10/28/2008
when i read this, i see you digging through some surreal imagined forest, and also blood rushing on a maze through veins and arteries.