I luv this story but your grammar sucks you have more mistakes than a gr 1 spelling test but it was still really good

Okay.

First off, I really like what you've done here. I love the Robin Hood stories, and I love your modern day rendition. Really, this story reminds of like a comic or... a Kim Possible episode. Your good/evil divides are very exaggerated, and you have a lot of action scenes. But it's an easy read, and overall, you're a very good writer.

That being said, you have many spelling mistakes. They're everywhere... if you want to improve this story, I'd definitely recommend sitting down and checking your spellings/typos.

I really enjoyed what you have here, though. I'm going to move on and check out your other stories in this line as well.

Good job!

yo i totally love this story and props for the propercy (no idea if that how you spell it) dream can't wait to read the others.

Hey, I just finished reading Sell Out. I wanted to say, it was pretty incredible! I love the way you slowly develop the plot, but still manage to keep it interesting. The sub-plots are also really creative, funny, and interesting. The story grabbed my attention and kept it. Seriously, because I started this at about 11o'clock, saying to myself "oh, just one story before bed." it was past 6am when I finally got to sleep, and the first thing I did when I woke up (3 hours later) was finish the last two chapters. I love the way the story flows, and I love your writing style. The only thing I would advise you to watch out for is your spelling and grammar. The story is still perfectly legible, but multiple spelling mistakes and accidental uses of words like "through" instead of " threw" look unprofessional and honestly, are a bit annoying. If you have Microsoft word, I suggest you use spellcheck. It can take awhile, but it fixes most of the mistakes. Overall, though I think your work is amazing!

first of all, i think this story has a lot of potential, but it seems like you make a lot of grammatical and spelling errors which makes it very hard to read.

i recommend getting a beta reader to help you catch the slip ups and work on the continuity of the story.

i've only read the first two chapters so far, so i dont know if these errors improve as the story goes on, but if it does i recommend going back and fixing the chapters.

Noelle.