Reviews for Dance with the Devil
haav chapter 10 . 12/15/2009
freaking love it! can't wait for some more! :)
akaCHEEKS chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
haha i feel like demon or human or not.. men are always horny. haha
heather.is.epic chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
A new one so quick! YAY! and so good with all the sexual tension! I look forward to the next one :)
Goddess Sati chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
that's great:)
Ck90 chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
I feel kind of bad for Aubrey I mean she thought that her sister was insane and now it turns out that Liz is right. Does she feel guilty about it? Alik is like a huge mallow! I want to pet him!
Cybernetic chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
Aw.
anon chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
i love this! alik is simply adorable... in an intimidating manly way.

update soon!
sherbetsi chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
ah yes! I'm so glad theyre finally getting to send more time together. Next one please!

Sian x
readaholicxxx chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
haha the sexual tension could be cut with a knife!

Great chapter-hope to get another one soon!
KnightsOfCydonia chapter 10 . 12/14/2009
AWW! I freaking LOVE Alik! It's great to learn more about the demons too. I wonder what his trait is?

Can't wait for more!
to fall or to jump chapter 6 . 12/13/2009
This story is amazing! It practically changed my life (from bored out of my mind to in love with your story) P Im totally going to finish reading it tomorrow i swear! its totally awesome Update soon please!
jaeeeee chapter 9 . 12/12/2009
Yay! you updated! i really liked this chapter, especially the end. can't wait for the next chapter.
Goddess Sati chapter 9 . 12/3/2009
that's amazing:)
WutNow chapter 2 . 12/3/2009
I don't know what happened to the transition between the first chapter and the second chapter. I thought he was going to claim her, and all of a sudden she's driving away? Did she do something to get rid of him? Things happened so fast I think you skipped some? Eh? She was just talking to him a second ago. And I liked the dialogue and all, but when the characters start talking about Alik being "not human" I thought it seemed extremely forced. I don't know, maybe it's just me.

I see you introduced new characters, that's good. And I wonder if Alex knows what Alik is, and if he's one of them as well.

-Agent
WutNow chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
Hello there! I have some time in my hands so I wanted to return the favor :). But just to let you know... I'm horrible at fantasy/supernatural stories so forgive me for my inability to review stories like these without asking questions. I kind of lack imagination :(

All your characters are really promising. I liked how they interacted with one another. I also liked the dialogue between them, which was funny and revealed a lot about their personalities. I'm guessing this is a vampire story? Hmm, you introduced a lot of characters in this story, and I would have been nice if you added more detail about their physical characteristics (maybe it's just me) or their relationship with Liz. Don't get me wrong, I know you added some in there, but more would have been nice. Overall, I think it's a good first chapter.

As for the things you can tweak- I would have liked to read more about Liz's environment/ setting. How old is she? I think this chapter focuses more on the story than character development, which is fine by the way. Liz is getting there- I like her spunky attitude. Another thing you can work on is adding some vivid details into the story. A balance of both dialogue and detail can go a long way :)

"Liz wasn’t afraid to admit it, he was cute – but that was the end of his good qualities."- loved that line. Overall. Great job. I'm off to the second chapter!
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