|Reviews for Dance with the Devil|
| Qatariyah chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
it's been a long time since your previous chapter, the story-line is foggy.
Hope by christmas you have more than one chapter ready...
| readaholicxxx chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
great! Bit of an insight into their past...
Cute ending too-loved it!
| KnightsOfCydonia chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
I so adore this story. I so want to know what the hell is going on with Jesse and Alik... and what is Doc planning? He seems like he's thinking up something. Crazy guy!
I can't wait for more! Christmas seems like its FOREVER away!
| Rosey-Blue chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
yay! an update! ;)
aww, sweet ending.
i'll read it again when i'm a bit more coherent ;)
| Verasque chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
You are amazing. You did this all on your own! Lovely chapter :)
| heather.is.epic chapter 9 . 12/2/2009
loved it nice mix of intense-ness and sweetness can't wait for the next _
| haav chapter 9 . 12/1/2009
I so, so, so, SO love your writing. I am absolutely in love!
Alik... I love him, too! Can't wait for more!
| readaholicxxx chapter 8 . 11/22/2009
haha wicked cool ending that would be a shock to the system eh?
Call me crazy but I think Doc is hilarious he reminds me of an annoying little sister asking questions all the time except a really really creepy sister who is actually a demon
| Qatariyah chapter 8 . 11/15/2009
so it's vapires vs. demons ?
| KuraKura008 chapter 8 . 11/14/2009
Excellent work! Your storyline is well paced.
| jaeeeee chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
Coolness! This is pretty good! Please continue :D
| Rock Happens chapter 8 . 10/26/2009
Hey there :] My final review for this story and hopefully I'll get it right this time.
Question: Is Alik younger than Doc? I was uncertain and had thought that Alik was the oldest one there. "The younger demon gave Doc his best glare, having no desire to put up with the crazy 'doctor'."
"He didn't care when his knock was answered and his hand instead opened the already unlocked door itself." Change answered to unanswered.
And we are back in the parking lot :D “Stay just a little longer,” he urged before dipping his head down to steel another kiss. Change steel (an alloy) to steal.
Those two were the only things I could catch (at freakin' two in the morning) but I would also like to comment on this line: "The demon's blood warmed pleasantly and quickly rerouted south. “Elizabeth,” he whispered breathlessly while turning around." I had a flashback to Pirates of the Caribbean (can't remember which one though). Hehe, Pirates fan?
And lastly, I was slightly disappointed because the story ended D; but do I smell a sequel(Please say yes)? Overall, the quality was great and I enjoyed reading the story very much.
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/26/2009
Alright, I admit it: I am the bitchy reader who will pester you for every little mistake :D but fail to compliment on a job well done (I am Asian, afterall). I suppose it's because the chapters are flawless so the tiny mistakes stick out even more to me (Slighty OCD-sh like that).
When in the parking lot before leaving for coffee: "...for talking to Alik surly wouldn't be pleasant." I think you meant surely rather than surly (meaning churlishly rude).
Another one from the same scene: "...pulled away in his mustang." Capitalize Mustang.
In the coffee shop: "It wasn’t justbecause I have a temper, so you don’t have to worry about me attacking you or something." Space needed in between just and because.
Back in the parking lot: "And they would both likely remember their reactions after seeing Alex stepping out of his mustang." Again, capitalize Mustang.
And this one is from the previous chapter, before the first break, the last sentence of one of the paragraphs: A part of her hoped that the insane doctor would quickly become bored if she didn’t respond to his taunts.”
| Rock Happens chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
First thing first (I have the memory span of a goldfish, what can I say), in the question "Who all is going to Staci’s?", all should be replaced with else. And now moving on, I am sorry about my last review. Had I relaized that Chapter 17 was the one in 'Sense of Elation' I would've made more of an effort to give a proper, overall one. But alas, only after I hit 'Submit' and looked for the "next" button did I realize my mistake. So to right my wrong: Very well written, unique and interesting plot, no notable errors in grammar, syntax or noun/prnoun confusion. Overall, it was well developed and didn't come off as rushed :]
P.S. It was pleasure getting to read the work of a fellow Muse fan.
| June's vampire chapter 8 . 10/19/2009
i'm so glad your writing again i really wanted to see what happened next!