Reviews for Dance with the Devil
OrangeKiss chapter 17 . 2/22/2012
Great job! Such a wonderful story. :)
TheSweetAngel18 chapter 17 . 12/16/2011
hello! new reader haha so i wasnt there for the journey of ur posting the chapters but i read it all

just wanted to say that i like ur was a little diff from others in the sense that elizabeth wasnt as rebellious about the relationship.

however, (thers always a however)...i found that u started alot of 'topics' (for lack of better words) in the beginning of ur story that i think u forgot about, or got carried away with the idea of finishing the story.

u had elizabeths friends introduced in the beginning n they seemed like they were a little important in her life, but possibly got bored with them? idk but even with alex and justin...they were somewhat brushed aside until the end a bit. if u wanted them gone, u could have made a senario that would take away the other characters...such as going on to school...but elizabeth couldnt cuz she had to work to support her sister n was taking a year off with alex and justin who were earning money to go to school.

with Alik i feel that there could have been alot more said about him, about his past. it was great when u mentioned the past with his mentor and how jesse killed him n all that n the timbit about his upbring...but we dont know how he got to that he reacred when he saw elizabeth, or how n what he did to keep himself away from her for 2years. how did he meet doc, or derek, n the other girl demon...he kind of gave off the alpha male feeling, which made me think he was a higher powered demon. but then i got the feeling that he was just older n thats all that was special about him. maybe explain his status in the demon world n why the others followed his lead. ohh but good points about the living in small groups. i liked that part.

but i do love the sister relationship u were building that was good. especially when doc said that he was trying to get rid of their bond. (i think u did a great job with his character he gave me the creeps)

i think u have a great skeleton of a story with some meat to what i would suggest is that u go over your story and see what details u can add to make it more realistic, and to bring ur characters to life. give them all a history, a connection to one another.

but agian i still think this was a good story.

hope i did not offend.

take care
Ray-Anne chapter 17 . 12/8/2011
It was odd that the climax and solution ended in three chapters... I felt this could be elaborated a lot more. Though I have no qualms with it either. It was a nice story
Destiny1406 chapter 1 . 10/8/2011
Loved the first chapter :) a few spelling errors but other then that it was good!
Creatures chapter 17 . 7/20/2011
This story was pretty awesome :D your a marvelous writer :D

and I definitely plan on reading some more of your work!
non.graceful chapter 17 . 7/18/2011
I hate you! I'm so tired! I stayed up to read this because everytime I tried to fall asleep I had to go back and read a few more chapters! First day back to school tomorrow, it's 2:23 am here and my alarm goes off at 7:15 am, you should be proud of you work..

Just fix up the relationship a bit... It's a bit off in some places.

Did I mention I hate you? Hmm... I'll get over it by the end of the week -.-
Bubbly Girl chapter 17 . 5/15/2011
I loved it! Great job! :)

Peace, Love and Happiness! :)

~Bubbly Girl
pendragone96 chapter 17 . 3/29/2011
Um...what about derek, aubrey, and Tim(sorry if I spelled the names wrong)? Are Aubrey and Tim going to stay together? Is Derek going to date another guy(which would be really cute)? Is doc dead? And Jesse? Is Tim okay with it? I really loved this story, and it gave me the biggest tingles in my palms and belly(I'm a hopeless romantic). I hope you at least make a sequel, or fix this up and get it published(not that there's anything wrong with it, I didn't mean to sound mean). It's definitely in my top 5 favorites.
OhMyPeanut chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
AH This Alik dude i seriously scaring me and it is on the first chapter :(
AnywhereYouGo chapter 17 . 1/26/2011
This story was lovely :)
balloonfista chapter 17 . 1/17/2011
aw :) I loved this story although I would've liked it to be longer ;)

balloonfista chapter 5 . 1/17/2011
Derek's dead? No!

fluffycloud chapter 17 . 1/6/2011
This is a pretty good story! The ending seemed rushed though. I would have loved to know how the battle was like and what happened to Jesse and Doc. I want to know that justice was done.
smurf-love chapter 17 . 12/13/2010
wow, i didnt expect that ending, i thoght that jesse would have something to do with hurting liz but i didnt think the doc would even if he did ive me the creeps too...
Sharky237 chapter 17 . 11/29/2010
This was simply an amazing story! The only disappointing thing is that you skipped over the good action-y bit where Alik fights and hopefully kills Jesse. There are some things with Alik's past that you didn't tie up, and how in the world did Alex become friends with Jesse? I don't know if an epilogue will suffice, I am thinking that the only thing that will satiate my appetite will be a sequel. One where we get to know more about Randi and Melphas as well as more about Alik's past. What would make it even more spectacular would be a pair of expecting parents.

Yet again, this was an AMAZING story.


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