It was very touching. I even let out an "aww." I like your writing, which can't be said for many writers on here. The storyline was wonderful. I must say, though, I am disappointed with one thing. It was too short. I think it could have been much more than an one-shot. I hope you win or won the writing contest. Oh, and I liked the title. Okay I'm done.

Very nice! ) Slightly confusing with the POV shift... Man poor Hiroto.

Aww... that was very sad... but excellent nonetheless. I liked that last sentance that said "Stuck in a world without a friend, a family member, the other half of his heart". But I thought it was very sudden how it switched from the two of them walking along, to Hiroto in jail. Anyways, I thought that was really well done. Nice job!

That was amazing. I truly loved it! I was just confused with the different POVs, you first started with first person and then switched to third person...? Overall, it truly touched me! I look forward to reading more from you. Oh and you can look at my works as well. one of them , The Promise reflects the same theme as yours only with two sisters. I hope to hear from you!

This was beautiful. I love how you caught the image of brotherly love in this story so well. Even though it's a one-shot, I can imagine this deveolping into a story with many chapters. Nice work. I look forward to checking out your other works.