Reviews for Disconnected
HurtMe chapter 1 . 11/4/2008
Absolutely stunning. So poignant that I can literally feel her pain. It almost reminds me of the movie "Thirteen".
english summer rain chapter 1 . 10/29/2008
you say nitpick, nitpick i shall :D

first para:

'She had two dresses in her hand-one very...' - 'She had two dresses in her hand; one very short...' (it's a little easier on the eyes, when i first read it thought hand-one was one word :S)

'you're not stupid. For two months ago since...' - 'you're not stupid. For two months ago, since Lia...' (also personally the use of 'for' was a little off, usually for me for is usually used as a conjunction to connect sentences, like 'but', and 'and')

second para:

'desire to get drunk and go over the edge– you will never make it there' (or something similar, it doesn't really matter, just as long as they aren't connected)

'Lia knows though. She's already figured– Evie's got something...' (ditto, sorry