Reviews for Desire
boxthissideup chapter 1 . 1/26/2010
I really like this poem, I especially like the use of bold, italics and underling. The empathises really makes the words stand out.

Very nicely written. :)
Lee Daniel chapter 1 . 1/26/2010
You never give yourself enough credit. This is a sweet poem, not at all cheesy. Cheesy poems are the ones that are so filled with cliche that it makes them impossible to read. I love the descriptions you use here. While similar, they are original enough to allow us to connect with the message.
Mizzuz Spock chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
This isn't cheesy at all, really. I think it's the no-rhyme scheme that keeps it from being that way.

It flows naturally and the rhythm works well for me. I loved these lines:

[Time is getting more ruthless

But something is progressing for the good

Like that of a new bloom in the spring.]

It's simple imagery, but still beautiful and very sweet.

Good job. :]